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Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by FeatherHunter, Jan 9, 2011.

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  1. I just did some touch ups so ill go post now:D
     
    #141 Empress_of_Shadows, Feb 19, 2011
  2. :)
     
    #142 *TheBlackRage (01), Feb 20, 2011
  3. Angels backstory has been added to Time Warp Trilogy part 3
    i did a semi-medium editing of his backstory so please read it I've changed some stuff.
     
    #143 FeatherHunter, Feb 20, 2011
  4. Its so confusing that ur changing thenparts weve already reaf
     
    #144 Empress_of_Shadows, Feb 20, 2011
  5. The parts weve already read*
     
    #145 Empress_of_Shadows, Feb 20, 2011
  6. lol I'm just trying to make them better but they're all so good I barely have to do any editing.
     
    #146 FeatherHunter, Feb 21, 2011
  7. arria's backstory has been added no editing required :)
     
    #147 FeatherHunter, Feb 21, 2011
  8. U kept the part that said anything in itallics is Angels language? I thot u would have put 'Note:' or something;)
     
    #148 Empress_of_Shadows, Feb 21, 2011
  9. ORDO lol the word is itaLics with one "l"
     
    #149 FeatherHunter, Feb 21, 2011
  10. I like the venice and other bits but twhat do u mean by agile angel
    And brawn angel? And whats thw sword do? He can already make clones unless it enhances his power...
     
    #150 Empress_of_Shadows, Feb 21, 2011
  11. Oops
     
    #151 Empress_of_Shadows, Feb 21, 2011
  12. Like i said i hate the vertical keyboardsT-T
     
    #152 Empress_of_Shadows, Feb 21, 2011
  13. each clone gets a specific skill and I think someone needs to reread...
     
    #153 FeatherHunter, Feb 21, 2011
  14. O when u said each gets his specific powers i thought you ment each gets Angels specific piwers:/
     
    #154 Empress_of_Shadows, Feb 21, 2011
  15. Ok sry i was rushed b4 i had to have a shower. It makes sence now
     
    #155 Empress_of_Shadows, Feb 21, 2011
  16. EACH CLONE GETS ONE OF ANGELS SPECIFIC SKILLS
    AGILE ANGEL-ANGEL'S AGILITY OR SPEED
    BRAWN ANGEL-ANGEL'S STRENGTH
    INTELLIGENT ANGEL-ANGEL'S BRAINS
    AND SO ON
     
    #156 FeatherHunter, Feb 21, 2011
  17. They steal my brainz?? Aghhhh
     
    #157 Empress_of_Shadows, Feb 21, 2011
  18. Sneak peek:

    Chapter Five
    The Revealing


    Cygnus


    The heat of a fire causes a haze.
    Now imagine a haze and how it moves.
    Now try and imagine a haze actually shimmering, although it looks like it's already shimmering.
    That's how it looked before they appeared.
    It was a group of people.
    Four women, one of them's eyes glowing green, another with a teenage looking female in her arms, the last with a crown on her head.
    And a man, who I hadn't seen since he was a baby, he was on the ground and bleeding.
    The wound was deep, and in his belly, possibly penetrating his stomach…
    Who knows, I'm not a doctor, and he wasn't very close to me.
    “Arilo Drega, ΩΕΣΑΔ evla pragu.” Cygnus whispered in his native language.
    “Dear God, Jerad is dead.” Crinus translated.
    “HELP US!” Lynet pleaded.
    Crinus slowly walked up to them, bending down next to Jerad, he unlatched a pouch on his belt.
     
    #158 FeatherHunter, Feb 22, 2011
  19. o_O
     
    #159 Empress_of_Shadows, Feb 22, 2011
  20. Mysterious
     
    #160 FeatherHunter, Feb 22, 2011
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