The Writer's Café

This is a preview of innocence, but it may or may not be put in this or future books of innocence.


"Where are you going?" she asked. There was a longing in her voice, and her eyes told me that she didn't want me to go. She didn't want me to leave her alone to face the troubles that lay before her. She wanted to come with me, and to tell you the truth, I wanted her to come too. But something inside told me I had to do this alone. 

"Where are you going?" she asked again, quieter. 

I gave her a small, sad, but knowing smile. "Wherever the wind takes me." I turned, then, and ran, right to the edge of the cliff. As my foot left the very edge, I begain to lift up, as I turned into a falcon, and flew upwards. 

I circled around and saw Liz, who waved her goodbye to me. I sang a cry in return, then went on, past the cliffs, pass the mountains, past the medows. 

Going wherever the wind takes me.
 
Here's a little brain storm i made for a book I'm going to write
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please give ur feed back
 
That seems like a decent plot....

Can someone read my story (Fading Fast) and tell me how Im doing on it? I would like any helpful criticism please 
 
I'll agree with pease cheese, but not really. Your story flow is fine, and pease is not. You should maybe slow it down a little. But sloe it down too much and it will take forever
 
Hey guys I didn't know if I'm allowed in here yet but um I'm making a book and I'm posting it soon can I come in an give a teaser about it?
 
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