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What I have of my story so far:


Two men with large wings and halos appear floating and gazing down at a small village called, "Angel Falls". One of the two men was slightly taller and muscular than the other. The muscular one speaks to the other, "You have come a long way, Attilius, Guardian of Angel Falls."
"It is because of you, Master Hadrian.", Attilius says.
Hadrian gazes outward into Angel Falls, as he begins to speak, "Attilius, Guardian of Angel Falls, do you know the importance of us Guardians?"
"Master Hadrian, our purpose is to roam the mortal realm, keeping these people safe and out of harm", Attilius says. Hadrian and Attilius both look down at the small village, as they see a few villagers chatting and running around. A dog runs about, barking at a couple bystanders.
"When Tetriatus Major told me to take you under my wings as an apprentice, I never thought that you would come to be such a keen Guardian.", Hadrian says.
"But there is one thing that I still cannot process in my mind.", Attilius begins to speak. "If we are supposed to be heroes, why must we be invisible to the world?"
Hadrian openly shows that he is a little worried to answer Attilius' question. But he speaks up. "Attilius, you will later learn about what you ponder about. Right now is not the time t-"
It seemed to Attilius that Hadrian was stunned. Attilius pndered about it for a little, but couldn't work up the courage to say something
"What is the problem, Master?" Attilius finally asks, reluctantly.
 
Awesome! I had to read it a few times to realize Hadrian was the one who was talking and stopped short by "t-", but otherwise amazing! You may want to put lines between people talking, otherwise it gets confusing.
 
Smighter.. You're leaving?


If it's s real life thing, don't mind me saying this, but is it something horrible like herpes? Because that's a two time virus....
 
IVE CHANGED MY NAME EVERYONE!

I used to be QueenBayleenOfToronto.

Obviously now I'm I_Got_Da_Swagger. But everyone may still refer to me as queen, as it makes it all much simpler :)

Thanks
 
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