Operation:interception feedback

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by german_idiot, Aug 29, 2010.

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  1. Point: OP is immature; can't handle negative criticism; not fit to be author
    Point proven
     
    #121 *Gen_Spartan (01), Sep 4, 2010
  2. My work here is done.
     
    #122 *Gen_Spartan (01), Sep 4, 2010
  3. oh. my. god. that was REALLY GOOD! write more!!! please! that was awesome!!
     
    #123 *Oh-Burn (01), Sep 4, 2010
  4. Yay u appear! And you got my gender right! Yay!
     
    #124 *iPimella (01), Sep 4, 2010
  5. Awesome.........
     
    #125 MagicV, Sep 5, 2010
  6. Is it me or is gen just urging this on
     
    #126 german_idiot, Sep 5, 2010
  7. New chapters up I felt inspired to do more chapters b4 I lost the ideas
     
    #127 german_idiot, Sep 5, 2010
  8. Ps:plz don't mind gen_Spartan he's just bad at letting things go
     
    #128 german_idiot, Sep 5, 2010
  9. I need to be in it w/magic
     
    #129 psycho_killer, Sep 5, 2010
  10. Um psycho don't know if I can do that but if I make a midevil type story I'll use ya
     
    #130 german_idiot, Sep 5, 2010
  11. Bump
     
    #131 german_idiot, Sep 5, 2010
  12. I like it! From a technical aspect, one observation I have from reading first chapter. Leader of a seal team would not be a lieutenant first class. You essentially combined the rank of an officer with that of an enlisted man. Just call him lieutenant. And don't make him a lieutenant commander either, at that rank he would not be commanding a team on a mission.
     
    #132 greystoke2me, Sep 5, 2010
  13. Mayb he's just that good? Idk hey I know mostly only navy and army ranks do u know any airforce ranks not really familiar on those
     
    #133 german_idiot, Sep 5, 2010
  14. Bump
     
    #134 german_idiot, Sep 6, 2010
  15. Um I recall german tellin that gen guy to leave BAN!!!
     
    #135 colt45ice, Sep 6, 2010
  16. He did leave...but not when German told him to
     
    #136 colt45ice, Sep 6, 2010
  17. Try not to bump it too much just when it needs to be bumped
     
    #137 CrayzJayz, Sep 6, 2010
  18. Ok....so what do u think bout it so far
     
    #138 german_idiot, Sep 6, 2010
  19. I think it's
























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    approved!
     
    #139 CrayzJayz, Sep 7, 2010
  20. Thanx jay.....I still think ur crazy though(in a good way)
     
    #140 german_idiot, Sep 7, 2010
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