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Re: KaW Fan Fiction Superthread (The Story Index)

-The last sentence of your first paragraph is incomplete
-you should join the third and fourth sentences of the second paragraph
-change to: "Several were on horses, many were wielding..."
-change the "a" after Cor says hold to "the"
-your missing a "n" in your "then" after the word approached
-new paragraph after "a fire burning within" and join "eight cavaliers. Their spears..." ( eight cavaliers, their spears...)
 
Re: KaW Fan Fiction Superthread (The Story Index)

I'm halfway done with homework and I want to sleep. But if I do sleep, I can't finish it tomorrow! What do I do?
 
Re: KaW Fan Fiction Superthread (The Story Index)

Don't be so overjoyed about it. A calm writer is a good writer.

Lol, jk. Knock yourself out!

*gives Lion a bottle of Alca(KaW)l
 
Re: KaW Fan Fiction Superthread

Version 2.0 added. Work still in progress. Contact me here or on my wall if you wish to aid anywhere.
 
Re: KaW Fan Fiction Superthread

A very important part of the FF constitution!

5) If you post a story on here you must be willing to take criticism. Any writer who attempts to kick someone out of a thread will be subject to [idk]
 
Re: KaW Fan Fiction Superthread

@ Delphin
After the sentence:

He carried a large menacing lance with a dark satin ribbon tied around the point end.

You put a “space” and put

Coranthar bowed to the man as he approached…
 
Re: KaW Fan Fiction Superthread

Oh I see what you mean. Hmm. What if I changed "him" to "the new arrival"? Or something to that effect.
 
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