A Foot Print In the Sand

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *arimay (01), Aug 22, 2010.

  1. A ghost physically had sex with you? And the children can talk to god? My my, not the best ending I've ever heard...
     
  2. Lolz it's a "happy" ending, something kids seem to need to write nowadays. I won myfirst writing competition at the age of 10 with the most brutally realistic ending ever! The runner up was also a tragedy.
    The topic was Family Love.
     
  3. So what gloomi, I know I'm not the best writter around I know that. Stop being so hard on me, I'm eleven give it a rest I'm new to this.
     
  4. So? If I'm not hard on you, you won't learn. Most of your readers are probably around 12 or 13 and don't have the insight required to criticize you. Therefore, if I don't try to help you who will?

    As for you being 11, I'm of the belief that children are NOT to be coddled. Better I make you accept that you're not perfect now, and teach you to accept criticism then have you be shattered in a couple years when you get a hard review from someone.

    You got the potential kid, but YOU NEED TO ACCEPT THAT YOU CAN IMPROVE!
     
  5. Alright that's it * takes gun shoots gloomi* there problem solved
     
  6. thats not nice..........and I still think they should call.....GHOSTBUSTERS!!
     
  7. Look gloomi I know I'm not perfect and I know I could improve but standing there yelling at a kid when they are trying there best it's NOT going to help!
     
  8. hey, i'm 11 too! 
     
  9. Just ignore gloominshes probably pmsing
     
  10. Gloomi she*
     
  11. Thank tigaz ur very nice 
     
  12. everything doesnt have to be 100% perfect gloomi
     
  13. Give gloomi a break! She's only trying to help!
     
  14. Hmm yelling? Compare

    "you have a cliché ending,"

    To

    "You suck! Stop writing now you bitchy little eleven year old!"

    I do not yell 
     
  15. @ tigaz? As I said before, you are not old enough to have the insight required to understand that not all stories are perfect.

    I am not PMSing, my period starts in exactly four days. This is how I talk to every writer. Arimay is the one blowing things out of proportion, not me.
     
  16. Nice story arimay =)
     
  17. arimay u wasted 80% of my battery this has been the best story ive read so far( not counting this one were ppl go to another planet to kill the agency)