*RikaTsukikai (01)
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Oh, I totally just read the rules again for this site and I've been back what, hardly a day? I've broken like, half. I should stop swearing so much.
The Writer's Café
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*RikaTsukikai (01)
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Yeah, I dunno. I was a little worried about my swearing. So I checked the forum rules. Swearing is one of the things not to do. You should know this, col, you're a mod. (jkjkdon'thurtmeplease)
I swear like a sailor.
I swear like a sailor.
FeatherHunter
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*NecroHyphen (01)
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Your swearing? Without me?
Can anyone check my story and send me some feedback? Cheers
Can anyone check my story and send me some feedback? Cheers
Storallelite
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I went to sleep and I missed everything....
*NecroHyphen (01)
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Same
FeatherHunter
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Oh well I'll fill you in!
I posted chapter 9.
Colonial is making a story.
izaln said he'd put up the prologue today.
Rika sweared.
Zaln gave me amazing feedback.
Smighter is clueless.
I posted chapter 9.
Colonial is making a story.
izaln said he'd put up the prologue today.
Rika sweared.
Zaln gave me amazing feedback.
Smighter is clueless.
Galway Girl
Well, I took a stroll on the old long walk
Of a day -I-ay-I-ay
I met a little girl and we stopped to talk
Of a fine soft day -I-ay-I-ay
And I ask you, friend, what's a fella to do
'Cause her hair was black and her eyes were blue
And I knew right then I'd be takin' a whirl
'Round the Salthill Prom with a Galway girl
We were halfway there when the rain came down
Of a day -I-ay-I-ay
And she asked me up to her flat downtown
Of a fine soft day -I-ay-I-ay
And I ask you, friend, what's a fella to do
'Cause her hair was black and her eyes were blue
So I took her hand and I gave her a twirl
And I lost my heart to a Galway girl
When I woke up I was all alone
With a broken heart and a ticket home
And I ask you now, tell me what would you do
If her hair was black and her eyes were blue
I've traveled around I've been all over this world
Boys I ain't never seen nothin' like a Galway girl
Well, I took a stroll on the old long walk
Of a day -I-ay-I-ay
I met a little girl and we stopped to talk
Of a fine soft day -I-ay-I-ay
And I ask you, friend, what's a fella to do
'Cause her hair was black and her eyes were blue
And I knew right then I'd be takin' a whirl
'Round the Salthill Prom with a Galway girl
We were halfway there when the rain came down
Of a day -I-ay-I-ay
And she asked me up to her flat downtown
Of a fine soft day -I-ay-I-ay
And I ask you, friend, what's a fella to do
'Cause her hair was black and her eyes were blue
So I took her hand and I gave her a twirl
And I lost my heart to a Galway girl
When I woke up I was all alone
With a broken heart and a ticket home
And I ask you now, tell me what would you do
If her hair was black and her eyes were blue
I've traveled around I've been all over this world
Boys I ain't never seen nothin' like a Galway girl
*NecroHyphen (01)
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Grrrrr what a rant at Iron... Check it out if you want, he was slaging off someones work on their thread so I... Stepped in...
@Dwei
Whatever you think brings out the main idea of the part. So if you have soldiers in... Say a jungle, you can start with one guy swearing about the jungle. And then after, start to describe the setting... Here's an example...
"Damn these f---ing annoying mosquitos," blared Charlie's voice over the group comm line.
Charlie was right. They had been dispatched to the Amazon Rainforest. It was literally a living maze of trees. Musty and brown vines lay strewn across the trees that reached some 30 feet into the air. They created a canopy large enough to obscure any sunlight, so it was dark and drafty on the base...
And there's a quickie. Something that engages a readers imagination.
iZaln
Whatever you think brings out the main idea of the part. So if you have soldiers in... Say a jungle, you can start with one guy swearing about the jungle. And then after, start to describe the setting... Here's an example...
"Damn these f---ing annoying mosquitos," blared Charlie's voice over the group comm line.
Charlie was right. They had been dispatched to the Amazon Rainforest. It was literally a living maze of trees. Musty and brown vines lay strewn across the trees that reached some 30 feet into the air. They created a canopy large enough to obscure any sunlight, so it was dark and drafty on the base...
And there's a quickie. Something that engages a readers imagination.
iZaln