The Writer's Café

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Irin (01), Jul 20, 2010.

  1. Oh, I totally just read the rules again for this site and I've been back what, hardly a day? I've broken like, half. I should stop swearing so much.
     
  2. Yeah, I dunno. I was a little worried about my swearing. So I checked the forum rules. Swearing is one of the things not to do. You should know this, col, you're a mod. (jkjkdon'thurtmeplease)
    I swear like a sailor.
     
  3. Don't worry everyone, I have a little Blackwall with a post that colon wishes he didn't post XP

    iZaln
     
  4. Your swearing? Without me? 

    Can anyone check my story and send me some feedback? Cheers 
     
  5. I went to sleep and I missed everything....
     
  6. Oh well I'll fill you in!
    I posted chapter 9.
    Colonial is making a story.
    izaln said he'd put up the prologue today.
    Rika sweared.
    Zaln gave me amazing feedback.
    Smighter is clueless.
     
  7. Galway Girl
    Well, I took a stroll on the old long walk
    Of a day -I-ay-I-ay
    I met a little girl and we stopped to talk
    Of a fine soft day -I-ay-I-ay
    And I ask you, friend, what's a fella to do
    'Cause her hair was black and her eyes were blue
    And I knew right then I'd be takin' a whirl
    'Round the Salthill Prom with a Galway girl

    We were halfway there when the rain came down
    Of a day -I-ay-I-ay
    And she asked me up to her flat downtown
    Of a fine soft day -I-ay-I-ay
    And I ask you, friend, what's a fella to do
    'Cause her hair was black and her eyes were blue
    So I took her hand and I gave her a twirl
    And I lost my heart to a Galway girl

    When I woke up I was all alone
    With a broken heart and a ticket home
    And I ask you now, tell me what would you do
    If her hair was black and her eyes were blue
    I've traveled around I've been all over this world
    Boys I ain't never seen nothin' like a Galway girl
     
  8. I've written a rough draft of a Prologue for my story...
    Only problem is I have no clue how to start a story, should it start with dialogue? The surroundings?
    What does a story usually start with? :?
     
  9. I can give u a hand over @ mine
     
  10. Grrrrr what a rant at Iron... Check it out if you want, he was slaging off someones work on their thread so I... Stepped in...
     
  11. @Dwei
    Whatever you think brings out the main idea of the part. So if you have soldiers in... Say a jungle, you can start with one guy swearing about the jungle. And then after, start to describe the setting... Here's an example...

    "Damn these f---ing annoying mosquitos," blared Charlie's voice over the group comm line.

    Charlie was right. They had been dispatched to the Amazon Rainforest. It was literally a living maze of trees. Musty and brown vines lay strewn across the trees that reached some 30 feet into the air. They created a canopy large enough to obscure any sunlight, so it was dark and drafty on the base...

    And there's a quickie. Something that engages a readers imagination.

    iZaln
     
  12. @Sand
    Haha thanks, it was just an example so blah haha.

    iZaln
     
  13. :shock: wow..... quite well for just an example..... Back to revision!
    and thanks Zaln!