Phoenix, in my three-second skimming of your story, I say: It reads really nicely. I have no idea what it was about, but it involved UV rays, falling, head-bashing, and other things.
Now it's my turn to show of my sick 1337 skizzles! You'll see the result in about ten minutes.
I'm a writer. But good writing takes work, and I am incredibly lazy. Last year I started writing (using my first ever cell fone) a series of stories. One of them is called Traveler in the Meadow. Glendale, Martin Fish and Redingorok the Riddling Wolf go on adventures to the City by the Sea, where they encounter an alien Horde known as the 12:34. Chapter 3 begins on the third day of their adventures, and finds our heroes lost underneath the Southern Gates of the city.
It's good to see this place coming back. I've seen many arguments about KaW being a war game that doesn't need FF, and part of me agrees. But another, greater part says FF was put in by users' requests, and it won't be leaving any time soon.