The Writer's Café

Third or 1st person?

Save the dumb split essence freak, same the whole world, huh? Feather thought bitterly. What about my memory?

Walking out of Tigris' palace had been one of the most courageous things Feather had ever done - that he could truly remember, at least. It was nightfall, now, but Feather knew that whatever had happened to his memory had been done purposely, a genuine malevolent act.

Feather sat down from exhaustion. The blistering heat from the day's earlier activites had left Feather sunburned and ridiculously angry. Now, the air was cool; cold, even. The only thing still maintaining the heat from earlier was the extremely fine sand that his heel was now digging into as he took off his shoes, and even it was now losing its heat.

Feather slammed his hands down on the ground in anger, the powdery sand lifting off the ground in little clouds, pushing outward from the impact.

“False memories, huh?” Feather muttered aloud. “Well, we'll see about that!”
 
So is that a yes to first? or no to first and yes to third. And you generally don't use too many pronouns when in third unless talking about another character. example:

Alec watched Magnus intently. He hooked a finger into his belt loop and pulled him towards him.

Notice how I used lots of pronouns?

Alec watched Magnus intently. He Alec hooked a finger into a loop on his Magnus' jeans and pulled him towards him.
 
I have several of my own fanfictions up. They're in Naruto and a Final Fanrasy VII and XIII crossover. Don't knock 'em til ya try 'em.

I'm also working on my own original story. *mumbles* I just need a CPU to work on.
 
I really hate the world right now. I swear to god, I genuinely hate it.

Humans are a race of "creators". We think of all this great fancy ****, slap some clay and rocks together, burn it to hell, and POOF! We have advancements, a polluted world, wars over technology, all kinds of crap.

What I'd like is a world like in an anime. One where you'd see massive airships, freaking ADVENTURES GOD DAMNIT. Here in America, we can't do jack-******* **** without having some asswipe calling the cops and then getting promptly arrested! Why? FOR HAVING FUN, TRYING TO MAKE THE BEST OUT OF THIS CRAPHOLE WHERE NOBODY ******* DOES ANYTHING.

Think about it. When was the last time ANY of you were TRULY unrestricted!? No idea? That's what I thought. Humans, with all their "infinite creative potential" feel the need for power. You know what happens then? A bunch of guys walking around, no smarter than the rest of us, pushing us around, and if we go against them!? LAWL, jail cell for j00!

With the laws of physics already killing the experience of living, there's this!? Hell, the single most interesting thing I've ever done in my life is started Parkour. Why? Because:
1)I don't see any ******* airships flying around to marvel at
2) I don't see any futuristic technology
3) I don't see anyone DOING anything, progress has basically stalled EVERWHERE.

And the best part!? I go, run along a few walls, get my thrill, climb some stuff... Wait, what?

"That's illegal. Stop that or you can be suspended from school or jailed."

This. ****-ing this. Humans are a very greedy species. They go about, doing whatever they can to achieve happiness. CAN SOMEONE PLEASE EXPLAIN, BEFORE I GO ON A KILLING SPREE, HOW THIS CAN BE ACHIEVED WHEN A BUNCH OF MORONS DOES EVERYTHING IN THEIR "POWER" TO STOP OTERS FROM ENJOYING WHAT IS THERE OF THEIR MISERABLE PATHETIC LIVES, AND NOBODY DOES ANYTHING ABOUT IT!?

Another reason I ****-ing hate the world is because of how unbelievably ****-ing IGNORANT everyone is! I can't go over to someone and say "hey, this freaking sucks. We need to change, to actually make sure people don't die miserable and unfulfilled," because they'll just respond, "But everything's fine as it is!"

LIKE HELL IT IS. This is the absolutely ****-inf perfect scenario.

You have a small group of people, ruling over a huge group of people, and only a few of the majority realize "hey, this really sucks!"
And THEN, it's IMPOSSIBLE to start a change because every other MORON is BRAINWASHED into believing this is ****-ing wonderful!




You all think I'm just having an angry rant about everything not being a magical wonderland with fairies and glitter-crapping unicorns. No, I'm not. I am completely ****-ing serious.

"Why not put this on a political forum or something?"

Because nobody takes you seriously that way. In order to start a change, it has to work like this.

1)Small group starts talking
2)News spreads a little, to the brainwashed population
3)The idea gets slowly passed along
4)The idea will reach other people, who can see this truth, and the cycle renews itself
5)Word eventually gets to powerful men and women, who agree with it
6)They mention it
7)The movement begins.

If the IDEA is there, it WILL happen. But the problem is, the idea is NOT there!

At the very least, guys, show this to your friends. Make this known among your schools, and friends, because once this new idea is planted, it'll spread.

Don't disregard my words. I am completely serious, and you know I speak the truth.
 
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