The Writer's Café

If I post my poem could you guys give me ideas on how to make it better for a comp I'm entering?

 

Why must Twilight have so many mental breakdowns?

Questions of life…

 

Sure innocent injustice!

 

I mean Im definitely not a pro, but I would love to help regardless. :3

 

Poem-individuality

Be unique from others
And different from the rest
Show who you truly are
At your very best.

You can be who like
Creed and colour matter not
For if you are just you
You'll be liked a lot

Nobody can stop you
From being who you are
Because on the inside you must know
You are a shining star!

Use your freedom wisely
And be unique in every way
Because you are so special
Each and every day!

Music, makeup, clothes
Thing for which you really care
How you live your life
How you style your hair

These are your strengths
Your assets, your qualities
It's what separates us
Making you different to me

Nobody can stop you
From being who you are
Because on the inside you must know
You are a shining star!

Hope you like it and can you let me know how to improve it?

 

Poem-individuality

Be unique from others
And different from the rest
Show who you truly are
At your very best.

You can be who like
Creed and colour matter not
For if you are just you
You'll be liked a lot

Nobody can stop you
From being who you are
Because on the inside you must know
You are a shining star!

Use your freedom wisely
And be unique in every way
Because you are so special
Each and every day!

Music, makeup, clothes
Thing for which you really care
How you live your life
How you style your hair

These are your strengths
Your assets, your qualities
It's what separates us
Making you different to me

Nobody can stop you
From being who you are
Because on the inside you must know
You are a shining star!

Hope you like it and can you let me know how to improve it?

 

Sorry it posted twice :-/

 

You may be the slightest bit eccentric,
Or maybe completely mad
But when one really thinks of it,
Is it really all that bad?

Just thought I should add that to your poem :3

 

Well done! I don't really have any critiques. :3

 

It's good

 

The onley pomes I can make are about death

 

Blood flows down the river
Turning round the bend
You notice
A mans head

 

*is disturbed by your poem*

 

Cheese for everyone!
-sheggorath

 

I refuse to become involved with the D Bo conflict, but he is necessary.

 

Time or a celebration! Cheese! Cheese for everyone!

 

Gotta love sheggorath although I liked him more in shivering isles

 

But cheese...if we took cheese from you wouldn't that mean we're eating you?

 

No.

I'm a cheesemuffin. I am not cheese.

I am MADE OF cheese, if that's what you're asking.

 

I hate indecision! ... or maybe I don't.
-sheggorath