The Writer's Café

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Irin (01), Jul 20, 2010.

  1. Well if you covered the floor in it…
     
  2. *scoot scoot scoot*
     
  3. Problem is he does it 24/7. And by butt I mean...uh...something...else...
     
  4. Does anyone even read here anymore? I've gotten no feedback on Linked, and I think I'll resume Revolution and postpone Linked sometime soon.
     
  5. You mean his uhhh balls
     
  6. I'm too busy ATM, school is just hell. Projects and tests one after the other, and there's a Christmas concert...
     
  7. @Ghost...yeah...his....(awkward)
     
  8. So for school in English today, we were learning about Shakespeare and sonnets and his work. For our homework, we were supposed to write a sonnet. But I decided to write a few. You guys wanna hear one?
     
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    • Chapter Two: Private Intimacy

      Violet

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    Italy looked at me from across the top of the piano, his gaze non-judging, gentle, and full of enjoyment. Italy is the best musician in the school. A thin serpent tattoo bulged on his left arm with every movement of that arm.

    He got up from the piano, a microphone in his hand as he approached me quickly, his head bending towards mine. He towered above me at a height of 6 foot 3. His voice was deep, but melodic.

    We stared into each others eyes, his the color of amber, like brown eyes in direct sunlight, but they were permanently that way. My eyes the color of a tropical ocean, shifting between green and blue.

    Such a stark contrast... As I ran my hand up his right arm, feeling the muscle underneath, the smooth expanse of skin.

    The smoothness of his lips on mine, pulling me to him, all singing having stopped, replaced by a sigh of pleasure. I closed my eyes, watching him do the same as I sank into the warmth of his body.

    Then just as quickly, I pushed him off me, placing my hands on his chest to keep him at bay. I could feel the defined torso underneath his shirt, and regretted my decision to push him away.
     
  10. LOL I FORGOT:

    SPOILER ALERT
     
  11. I'm really trying to build on emotion when it comes to girl PoVs. It's... extremely hard for me.
     
  12. Its hard to write from the opposite gender's POV, I always have trouble writing from a boy's POV :(
    So I usually just make all my main characters girls...lol
     
  13. Pikachu, loaded for bear

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  14. We're talking about my story, not pikachu.
     
  15. Pikachu is awesome though. :(
     
  16. Regardless, all that did was create extraneous lag for me.
     
  17. New installment of TSoB posted! Everyone please say hello to Italy.