The Writer's Café

I shall now post 1 of the three poems that has kept me away from KaW so you may all find it in your hearts to forgive me for my absence.

Nah, jk. I just wanted some feedback. XD

Gotta warn you though. It's a bit morbid. And it doesn't have a title. And it may or may not be finish. And you may or may not think I'm crazy after you read.

But most of you think that anyway...soooo...

Who are you to tell me,
Who I am inside?
Who are you to show me?
Whose rules must I abide?
Who are you to care?
Who are you to see?
Who are you to choose?
When will you set me free?

You never said you loved me.
You never thought to give,
You never shared a reason why
You thought this thing should live.
You never told a soul,
You never helped me out,
You never shared your secrets,
You made me want to shout.

I hate your old blue truck,
I hate your stupid lies,
I hate your guilty smirk,
And your made-up alibis.
I hate your mad abuse,
I hate your stash of beer,
I hate your angry words,
And your eyes that make me fear.

Why can't you call me pretty?
Why can't you stop the hate?
Why can't you keep from pushing me
Away from my real fate?
Why can't you say you love me?
Why can't you walk away?
Why do you even want me?
Please don't make me stay.

Please don't call me worthless,
Please don't hold me down,
Please don't take advantage,
Of me and all I've found.
Please don't keep me here.
Please don't hit my face.
Please don't make me broken.
I need to leave this place.

-8/15/11
 
A song I wrote after reading Irin's poem

I call it

Cake:

What can you do when you're helpless?
Left alone and in harm's way
When your life is lost and lonely
Living life just day by day
Gone are all the happy people
Gone the cheer and gone the smile
Going to the darkened window
Just to sit there for a while


Always gone and always lost
Never here and at a cost
I ask what more can you take?
Life's no piece of cake.

When I was younger I was careless
Let them win and left me changed
All my heart and its ambitions
The damage? Well it ranged
For my heart was crumbling
Soul was shattered
Nothing saved me
Nothing mattered
Body whole but mind so broken
Nothing left in me for hopin'

Always gone and always lost
Never here and at a cost
There is nothing left to take
Life's no piece of cake

Now I'm back, but still unstable
But my love for you is breakin'
You no longer hold my heart
But why am I still shakin'
Now the loveliness is absent
Gone the fairy dust and magic
No more flowers no more pain
Yet how I dream of you is tragic

Forever gone forever lost
Dreaming here but at a cost
Still, I won't let you take
Life's MY piece of cake
 
B-but the cake is a lie!
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Erm... Can I get some feedback on this poem? It's a bit... Well, you'll see.

Think about yourself:
What do you care about?
You care about yourself
You are so self-centered
You might think you care about others
Think you care about their feelings
Care about me
But in the end
It all boils down to you
Doesn't it?

Think about others:
What do they care about?
They care about themselves
They don't care about you
They can pretend
Just like you pretend
But they don't care about you
Don't care about your feelings
Care about me
Because it's all about them
Isn't it?

Think about me:
What do I care about?
I care about you, right?
I must, you think
But your wrong
I'm just as self-centered as you
I don't care about them
Don't care about their feelings
Care about you
I can't because I'm just like you
Aren't I?

8-14-2011
 
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