"The Mercenary" Feedback and Discussion

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *OddlyYouSawMe (01), Sep 7, 2010.

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  1. U R AWESOME
     
    #61 Fangedwolf, Sep 22, 2010
  2. Wow. It actually gave me chills.
     
    #62 Winters, Sep 22, 2010
  3. Chapter 2, part 1. Up
     
    #63 *OddlyYouSawMe (01), Sep 22, 2010
  4. :!:
     
    #64 Winters, Sep 22, 2010
  5. Que?
     
    #65 *OddlyYouSawMe (01), Sep 22, 2010
  6. Awesome ^^
     
    #66 Winters, Sep 22, 2010
  7. Nice!
     
    #67 *lady-marian (01), Sep 22, 2010
  8. Excellent, except for the last sentence .
    TOO MANY WELLS!
     
    #68 *iPimella (01), Sep 23, 2010
  9. That was intentional. Imagine someone saying that.
     
    #69 *OddlyYouSawMe (01), Sep 23, 2010
  10. Lolz... I guess, it just didn't flow right to me... Whatever you're a better writer than me so I guess I can't be TOO persnickety. Best story on forums next to battle camp 
     
    #70 *iPimella (01), Sep 23, 2010
  11. Chapter 2, Part 2. Sorry for the little vacation.
     
    #71 *OddlyYouSawMe (01), Oct 16, 2010
  12. IT'S BACK
     
    #72 Bastion, Oct 16, 2010
  13. Wonderful story
     
    #73 RlMJOB, Oct 16, 2010
  14. Yay
     
    #74 *krypton134 (01), Oct 16, 2010
  15. Awesome story!
     
    #75 *lady-marian (01), Oct 16, 2010
  16. Chapter 2, Part 3. Up
     
    #76 *OddlyYouSawMe (01), Oct 17, 2010
  17. Great job as always. Your use of description is up to par, but what really sets you apart is your verb choice combined with your ability to weave your "voice" throughout the story
     
    #77 *iPimella (01), Oct 17, 2010
  18. Nice story. Keep writing.
     
    #78 WW1225, Oct 17, 2010
  19. Sorry that i'm slow on the story but it's epic!
     
    #79 mathew057, Oct 17, 2010
  20. Chapter 2, Part 4. Up
     
    #80 *OddlyYouSawMe (01), Oct 17, 2010
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