A Foot Print In the Sand

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *arimay (01), Aug 22, 2010.

  1. Please comment when readed!
     
  2. I didn't read the first book, but I'm liking the second!
     
  3. Read the first one it's posted on here and a lot of people liked it so I think you would too.
     
  4. I love your book, especially how you cheesily worked the title into the ending, I  it!
     
  5. I know but I thought it was sweet! 
     
  6. Check for words used repetitively, you seem to do that often.
     
  7. This is good 
     
  8. KEEP WRITING! 
     
  9.  it, arimay!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Please continue!!
     
  10. In a little I'm gunna play with my lil bros
     
  11. Declan drove me to school and dropped me off.
    "Ill see you in the audiance. I'll be standing off course. No reason to sit in a chair if nobody can see me." he giggled at his sentence. I giggled too. He kissed me and told me that I would do good. I was happy. Everything was clear. I had broken up with Lucas a while ago if I hadn't mentioned plus my speech was in my hand all folded up into a square. In the other hand was my gown. Blue and yellow, the colors of my high school. I had a class before the big moment. Soon it was time I slipped my gown over my clothes in the bathroom and went back to the class room the get in a line outside the theater. We soon all walked in and all the graduates sit in the front of the adutorium. I soon walked out and was sitting in the third row on the end. Declan walked toward me and kissed me on my forehead and didn't say a word. Since know one could see him until he talked out loud he could do that without being disturbed. I watched as my principal said a couple words and started calling the names to come and get their rolled up degree. I walked up when they called my name than started my speech.
    "I better keep this short and sweet since there's a ton more people to go. I want to thank all my teachers here because I want them to know that they are the reason that I'm privleged to go to college for teaching me all the things I need to know. I also want to thank my mother for being so supportive- I stopped myself to think and than I said it out loud.
    - and I'm also getting married to Declan mom. Uh, I love you mom! And the rest you people here, well try to make the best of it. Bye!" not that my speech was acward enough! I just needed to add the "I'm getting married" part to it. I walked down the stage and sat back in my seat. My speech lied there was actually a couple rows left. My schoolcwas very small. Declan soon came over to me whispering in my ear so nobody could hear him so he wouldn't be seen.
    "Are you crazy?" he giggled. I laughed at little too. I soon looked at my mom with her mouth hanging open. I just couldn't wait to talk to her...not.
     
  12. I can't wait for more!
     
  13. I loved the first one and the second one is super good so far :D I love it!! :)
     
  14. Wait a Moment - declan brought her to School so everybody saw an driving Car w/o a driver?!
     
  15. Exactly what I thought green