World of War feedback

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Chocolate_Milk2, Aug 8, 2010.

  1. BUUMMMPPPP!!!!!
     
  2. I ment get the plot moving faster and explain things better to paint a picture in the readers mind
     
  3. 
     
  4. I'm sorry but as the son of a soldier I gotta say, WTF are they using M4's in 3033?
     
  5. Cause Earth was never updating the weapons cause they never needed them an once the war started they had no time to update
     
  6. Hey where's the French commander?
     
  7. There is no French commander
     
  8. So then when did humans stop making weapons?
     
  9. The humans tore down factories of the government and the government had to do somthing quick so they had no time to make more weapons
     
  10. Bumpbumpbumpbumpbumpbumpbumpbump
     
  11. So when's the next chap. Coming?
    Bump
     
  12. Woah u changed ur name?
     
  13. Next chapter coming soon