World of War feedback

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Chocolate_Milk2, Aug 8, 2010.

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  1. Get the story going faster add suprises and allow characters to get hurt
     
    #141 *Bjorn21 (01), Aug 11, 2010
  2. I allow myself to get hurt, constantly
     
    #142 Chocolate_Milk2, Aug 11, 2010
  3.  thts y i love chp 2 
     
    #143 *cassandra101 (01), Aug 11, 2010
  4. I mean the main characters
     
    #144 *Bjorn21 (01), Aug 11, 2010
  5. Or is it 3 
     
    #145 *cassandra101 (01), Aug 11, 2010
  6. Yes cass I know u love your chapter
     
    #146 *Bjorn21 (01), Aug 11, 2010
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    #147 *cassandra101 (01), Aug 11, 2010
  8. Currently I'm planning for a betrayal but I need to build up the action
     
    #148 Chocolate_Milk2, Aug 11, 2010
  9. Buil it fat and keep it interesting no1 wants to read the same thing over and over


    And with that BJ is out 
     
    #149 *Bjorn21 (01), Aug 11, 2010
  10. If I ever learn how 2 write threads I think I'll write a story but it will not be as good as urs





    Well duh I suppose I'm only 12
     
    #150 CrayzJayz, Aug 11, 2010
  11. I'm 13
     
    #151 *Bjorn21 (01), Aug 11, 2010
  12. Oh








    BTW BUMP!
     
    #152 CrayzJayz, Aug 11, 2010
  13. I'm 13 as well
     
    #153 Chocolate_Milk2, Aug 11, 2010
  14. Oh well then I guess I'll do pretty well I pride myself on speaking well


    But typing might be different
     
    #154 CrayzJayz, Aug 11, 2010
  15. It's no too hard



    Night
     
    #155 *Bjorn21 (01), Aug 11, 2010
  16. How I write threads?
     
    #156 CrayzJayz, Aug 11, 2010
  17. every1 left
     
    #157 CrayzJayz, Aug 11, 2010
  18. Good job. It's a little confusing how quickly the story is progressing but other than that thumbs up 
     
    #158 *iPimella (01), Aug 11, 2010
  19. BUMP SO EPIC























































    IT'S APPROVED BY CHUCK NORRIS
     
    #159 Chocolate_Milk2, Aug 11, 2010
  20. So I shoould slow things down a little bit
     
    #160 Chocolate_Milk2, Aug 11, 2010
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