When I was reading it us sounded like a five finger death punch song. Either way good stuff. Keep it up.
Not actually a rap. It's free verse poetry which is why there's no consistence rhyming scheme. Although poetry and rap go hand in hand and parts where written with Charron's flow in my head the intention still wasn't for it to be a rap.
Good read, also rapped it in my head while reading. Just shows it was written well if one can find a rhythm to the words! Look forward to seeing more.
Its almost impossible for me to read this without hearing Eminem spit these bars 100 mph in that rythm that has got
Since we are on the structure, it is jazz verse essentially, which is great stuff. I was snapping my fingers at times. Reminds me of some poetry slam sessions I used to watch online.