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Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Rainkeeper, Jul 8, 2010.

  1. But very good story I'm hooked already
     
  2. Malestone
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    Sorceror
    A Magic Wand, A Staff, Wizzard Hat & Robes
    Fatherly, Amicable, Brave, Courageous
    Piercing Blue Eyes, Snowy White Hair, Wizened Old Face, Twinkle in the eye, Tall, walks sprightly, able to float, walk through walls.
     
  3. Bastion, I felt your co was lacking in bloodiness.
     
  4. Name:Anikin
    gender:male
    race:human
    rank:Jedi master
    weapon:lightsaber
    personality:quiet and active
    other:ADHD
     
  5. Name: Lucas
    Age: 15
    Occupation: too young to work
    Weapons: Ninja stars, nunchucks and escrima sticks(look them up)
    Personality: Lucas is small for his age, but everyone who knows him knows that he is like a firecracker. He uses his small size to his advantage, moving faster than his opponents. He can be a jokester sometimes, but not very often. He is a very outgoing person and has a lot of friends. He dosent like making enemies. No one likes becoming his enemy either. (please keep me in for a while)

    ~iDan~
     
  6. ** This is in the middle ages around 1400 a.d so early guns/pistols allowed. NO SEMI/AUTOMATIC OR FUTURISTIC WEAPONS **
     
  7. Your story was wicked mate! I'm hooked! When's it's coming out in the shops? Lol
     
  8. So I'm good. Right?

    ~iDan~
     
  9. Name: Ucanlos
    Age: 25
    Occupation: Royal Guard
    Race: Titan
    Weapons: Giant Axe, Bow Of Death
    Armor: Plate Of The Titans
    Personality: extremely aggressive, Loyal, Never gives up
     
  10. Age:14
    Occupation:Ranger knight
    Name:HIOUP.
    Weapons:Oak long bow and basterd sword(it's really called that)
    Personality:Loyal and fights for the noble cause.
     
  11. Name: Chase
    Race: Human/Dragon Lord
    Age: 16
    Occupation: Dragon Lord
    Weapons: A mythical Dragon-Scythe with magical properties, and of course everything a dragon can do
     
  12. Personality: Evil. Dragon. Lord. What else is there to say? Wants nothing but the destruction of the main character in the book.
    Weapons: I forgot to mention the army of dragons under my control.
     
  13. ** UPDATE **
     
  14. Nice

    ~iDan~
     
  15. ** Update, battle which I don't know if I should've made bloody **
     
  16. Chapters awsome and could u put me in plz man just some how
     
  17. Thanks man best noob trainer ever!!!
     
  18. U realize u can join mine...right? Lol good old TNO
     
  19. Lol, but zalns part of it!!!