The Writer's Café

I spent the past THREE HOURS on reddit, and I have just spelled the word award as awkward and made a typo so bad my hamster laughs at me.

 

... :lol: :lol: :lol:

 

You're not a ******* hamster, you don't get to laugh

 

Candi.

Go home, your drunk.

 

I'm not drunk, I'm just really tired.

 

'Kay, just read tired as tiered, never mind. I'm going.

 

Lol I will have something up tonight, something I want opinions on before I actually write the story.

 

Oh, look, I passed incoherency and now I'm just not sane.

 

Well isn't that great?

Candi is insane.

I knew I should not give you my number.

 

Meh. I'll care later

 

Haha, go to sleep Candi.

 

Also: I have 4 chapters done for my book. Should I make a chapter 5, then start posting or start now?

 

(keep in mind i am an amateur)

Orange sky fades softly to damp black
Glass breaks harshly on deaf ears in silence
Pools of blood lie stagnant at her small feet
Crying out in vain, she clears him from mind

Runs till she's shaking, pierced by her own will
Tears of blood roll from her eyes for his loss
Stilettos softly breaking deaf'ning silence
He stole everything from her once, no more

She took it after all the dark, lone nights
Flesh sick for more, thought gives way to passion
These cries, be disaster no more to her
breath frozen quickly in this icy night air

heart beats fast, pulse quick'ning when she sins, like he
steaming snow fades, ends cool;water floods the wound

thanks for reading

 

Not bad, but maybe use some different, more flow-ie words instead of poured. Maybe flowed over the wound. Ya know, that sort of thing. Besides things like that not bad

 

Thanks hulk, i'll try that from now on

 

>.<


Why do so many people hate :lol:


Nobodoy comment :twisted or I will so something

 

Oh darn .... :twisted: I just learned how to do that on this device

 

You're an idiot. I just helped out a new writer, literally 3 posts above this, and you call us rude.

 

Oh yeah, hulk, are you IronHulk? Or, I mean, were you IronHulk?

 

There's Angel, once again confusing constructive criticism with hate.

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