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Hey guys
I'm gonna try and write an story called "All the names above the sun"
I am looking for characters.
The main idea is it's this guy who lives an ordinary life but his world gets turned upside-down which leads him from the middle-east to the US. He gets caught up in politics and terrorism.
Tell me what you think
 
Here is the intro:
"That was along flight" I said to myself as I washed my face and brushed my teeth.
I came out of toliet with my suitcase strolling behind me. I was looking for my wife and kids but they weren't there. "they must of gone to duty free" I thought but then I saw " " (not made name yet) my eldest son coming running to me. I was surprised because he looked desperate to get to me. As he came closer I saw that he was wounded, I ran to help him. He had some bruises on him face and arms. He had a cut across his eye and shirt. "What happened I asked him"I asked him. As he was going to answer he gasped and fell to the ground.
 
I looked behind me, a bullet skimmed past my ear and hit a suitcase. The suitcase caught fire and rolled slowly made it's way to a door. As soon as it hit the whole door shattered to pieces. After the smoke cleared away a group of masked and armed people came out. I knew what I had to do. I grabbed my son and ran to the nearest fire exit and kicked the door down. I layed my son in a corner and made my way back to the disaster. When I came back I was shocked. People were lying on the floor, I went to the nearest one. I bent down and picked his head up. "what happened" I asked.
He said nothing, I turned his head around. There was something stuck to his neck. I looked at it, I examined it. I stood up and shouted "I know you're here Sam".
 
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