I'll be going to Chicago for the first time this summer. As well as Los Angeles. As well as Hawaii. As well as China Hey! Why are the question and exclamation marks grey now
I have an idea for a sort of mystery horror book which is working out pretty well in my mind. I will post a little snippet in the morning cause I am tired as hell, so i just wanted to let people know about it.
@Feather did you get a new iDevice? Because its only grey if you have the new iDevice. (I still have my old 2nd gen) They changed it to grey and a bunch of other emoji.
Preview for a story I'm thinking of making. This is partly based on a game called amnesia the dark descent in some of the aspects. David held his breath in hushed silence as the floorboards outside creaked. His heart raced and the blood pulsed in his veins. His mind played out horrific endings to this and he knew their would be no fast death here. Suddenly he heard a terrifying,heart wrenching scream and he heard ______ pleading in desperation. Then he heard an anguished moan and the sound of chewing and he realized the thing was eating ______ alive! Oh ****, oh ****, oh **** he thought this is the end were all going to die in this damn place. Then the moaning stopped following by a crashing bang. Then the creaking slowly left the room. He breathed a sigh of relief his heart slowing down he flicked on the lantern and just stood their in shock. Then all hell broke loose. It's probably terrible or something I'm not that good of a writer just wanted to try and if it is terrible just say it I just made this up on he spot and that would be somewhere in the middle or so. Constructive criticism feedback and the usual hate are all welcome today
Spaces between your commas. Other than that: there's too much _____, then _____, then _______. Also, you need something to indicate his thoughts (IMO, not everybody likes this).
Oh no the spaces were just a name I haven't decided on yet and yeah the other stuff would help. I thought it would be terrible cause I'm not good at capturing emotions.
No, not the spaces. I mean it's kind of a rambling of, 'This happened. Then this happened. Then this happened. Then this happened.'
Can someone explain what a run-on is? I never understand how you can tell if it is a run on sentence.
A sentence that goes on and on and on like this you are supposed to put in periods I think to tell you the truth I'm not 100% sure but I think this is pretty accurate so yeah this is a run on sentence. Phew....
Trying to beat the writer's block... ~Metallic~ Argenta and Auriel. Silver and gold. Beautiful colors and metals, colors with depth beyond a showoffy metal. The true meanings hidden beneath ostentatious jewelry only good for flaunting in others' faces. Purpose buried underneath a mountain of prizes, merely prizes to be shown off. ~*~ Argenta is caged in sapphire and emeralds, drowning in waves of blue and green, her color lost underneath the dark shadows of jade and turquoise. She is used, a showcase for more expensive, showy tastes. She is lost under the bright colors of gems, even her presence overlooked as one oohs and aahs over the prize she holds. While she is of pure quality, she is ignored for the bigger prize: crystals, stones that sparkle in the light, gems cut and polished to shine more than their showcase. And so she sits in the background, ignored as she holds up the world's treasures for all to see. ~*~ Auriel is more coveted than Argenta, his bold flair and rarity attracting thousands, if not millions, to him. He is found, bought, and sold. An endless cycle. Perhaps in between, he is crafted into a display case like Argenta. He is an in demand metal, for obvious reasons. Everyone says every ring, every piece of beautiful jewelry is cased in his purest form. He is endlessly molded into new forms, only to be melted down- and the process starts again. He is smothered in sparkling colors, cut and polished crystal that makes him fade into the background. Just a display case, again. And he complies as well. How can he not? He can't protest the cycle of his endless life. ~*~ And yeah, it's short. I'm pretty sure it's not accurate, so don't shoot me or anything for that.