The Writer's Café

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Irin (01), Jul 20, 2010.

  1. I know^.^ just silly me thinking that from a skim
     
  2. Yawn... Excuse me, I'm tired. I'll check up on this later. NO MORE BARFIGHTS!
     
  3. I'm glad Ordo is back. Which one, Ordo or Rang?
     
  4. What do you mean by that? Ordo is rang and rang is ordo
     
  5. The old school ordo with improved spelling and a spraypaint:3

    And its nice your glad im back to
     
  6. Hey guys, One is up on Wattpad :D
     
  7. Whats tht, and i installed a disco ball in te trench!
     
  8. Time to write...
     
  9. So ordo is rang? Shocker....
     
  10. Feather That reminds me. I recently had a dream about Kawmalot....
     
  11. Lol ;)

    So, here's a simple sentence (mostly) (of the events, some of which I deleted so I would have surprises left) outline version of the beginning of the rewrite.

    Feather begins his journey as a guide for the Android Newbs. He encounters the mod known as Black Bird. Black Bird hurts Feather. Feather tries to fight back, but is imprisoned for a total of six hours when the Sultan of Tige, Tigris, summons him.

    The Sultan gives him subtle hints that he needs to look in his bag, really examine it, find something important inside. Tigris tells him that everything he can remember besides the events of today are fake, planted within his head as part of a plot to keep a symposium of special individuals quiet.

    She tells him to write all this down because because everything he experiences today he won't remember tomorrow and they'll be replaced by fake ones. She continues telling him things he doesn't wanna hear so he walks out.

    Feather, frustratedly, decides he'll listen to her and he goes back inside. He is denied access, but told that "they're" coming for her and that he needs to leave now. He takes off but doesn't get very far when a mod intercepts him. She engages in battle but he somehow wins. He runs as far as he can when he meets Storallelite.

    He tells her he's endanger and she immediately takes a very eager, almost scary interest in his problems, but doesn't convey it. When he informs her of his apparent memory loss problem, she seems suspiciously uninterested, like she didn't hear him. Except she raises her eyebrows.
     
  12. *in danger, not endanger lol
     
  13. Huh sounds like something I would dream about....
     
  14. YES! I was hoping you'd like it. Now for the other's opinion.
     
  15. Why were you hoping that.....
     
  16. Because you'll be instrumental to the story. :D
     
  17. Huh ok. Anyway I'm off to start writing about Kawmalot see I'f it's stray material or one of my weird ass dreams like the one where spartans fought wookies on the enterprise