The Writer's Café

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Irin (01), Jul 20, 2010.

  1. I decided 2 split one really long chapter into 2 so I didn't have to type so much
     
  2. Yeah, I do that alot too. Sometimes I end a chapter just because I don't want to type. xD
     
  3. I'm going into part two of Dragon Tale!
     
  4. That's great! Congratz Utho. Let's celebrate with some cake!!!
     
  5.  WOO PARTY! after ninetine chapters! Part two will try to be better. It takes place a year after the events of part one. I'll keep writing if you fans keep reading!
     
  6. I'll read it, I'm captivated
     
  7. This is a small excerpt of a book I'm writing. Please comment if you want me to write more or start from the beginning. And easy on the comments I'm pretty young.

    "Angus!" Julia yelled as Aaron collided with her little brother. A net of vines exploded from the cement ground as Evergreen tried to stop the two boys from falling into the pool. Phoenix observed the situation and sent another heated blast at Aaron and Angus. The net of vines instanly withered and died as the heat and friction punctured a hole in the strong net. Evergreen instantly collapsed to the ground as the vines died. Salmon and Minnow quickly went to their older sister's side trying to revive her. No one was able to stop Aaron and Angus from falling into the pool. "Aaron!" Julia yelled as both him and her little brother fell in. "Now to end this," Phoenix growled, large flames beginning erupt from the palms of his hands. At that moment 1000 volts of electricity entered Phoenix's body, the powerful blast coming from Natalie's clenched fists. (to be continued..)
     
  8. Sorry for any typos.
     
  9. Cool and party for utho!!!!
     
  10. CHAP 2 OF THE DEMON CHRONICLES IS NOW UP!!!!
     
  11. Ohh and irin would u like a coustimized
    picture for this thing???
     
  12. Check it out and tell me
    Wut u think
     
  13. I did!!!(yes I read fast!!)
     
  14. Wut u think post on the feed back thread
     
  15. Pretty awesome
     
  16. YAH!



    and can u tell me that on the feedback thread pls I don't want to crowd
    This thread
     
  17. Chapter 3

    I woke up the next morning in a heap on the floor,
    "hello nico," said a voice next to me "how did you sleep?"
    I noticed the voice was that of my friend Mark.
    "Not very well at all." I replied
    "I can't even contemplate what you are  going through at the moment," he said 
    "but I know it's hard."
    Mark had always understood me he could tell my moods and my thoughts it was as if he was inside my head, which had always scared me a little.
    "When did you get here?" I asked
    "I'm not to sure actually, but when I got here you were out cold."
    I wondered if he knew where sister was, I mean Mark knew everything about the city of Manhattan, and most of it's inhabitants, if he didn't know who would?
    "Mark do you know where my sister is? I was going to follow there car but I was knocked out."
    He replied "I may have a vague idea, but, you must heal before we leave." to my knowledge I wasn't to badly injured I tried to get up but I fell in pain 
    "don't move I've just bandaged the wound, it looks like you were stabbed in the leg,I'm surprised you weren't killed by the bullets I found in the wall, but I suppose you've never been badly hurt by machinery before that's maybe why you weren't shot."
    He was right a couple of years ago there was a large gang war in Manhattan and I was caught in a crossfire with my sister and I had tried to shield her with my body the bullets had curved around my body, after that I was known as a hero but I knew I had nothing to do with it, I could feel it in my bones it had come from another power an older unexplainable power.
     
  18. V good Zach cnt wait to read more