The Writer's Café

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Irin (01), Jul 20, 2010.

  1. Just eh, a little something I wrote when I was thinking of everybody. It's weird, but I dunno. I'll just post it.

    (The first few lines are choppy but I think I got the rhythm later. I'll touch it up, for my own sake.)

    Sometimes I look,

    Into an old grimy window,

    Beyond the truth that is time,

    And see the past.

    Where we danced and played,

    And we sang all day.

    But we sing no more.

    For we've all moved on

    And now we sing our own songs

    With others we gladly embrace

    No longer does that past trouble us,

    The nightmares that started fuss.

    The mistakes we all had to make.

    We never said goodbye,

    Only whispering "Hi,"

    Never looking into the other's face.

    Sometimes we return

    To sing our own words

    But we never stay very long

    For we've all moved along,

    And forged brand new bonds

    With ignorance and subtle haste



    The old ties we had,

    With which I am sad,

    To say that they've all gone to waste.

    But this is the cycle,

    These repetitious nights,

    That always bring nothing to light.

    But with this, I say.

    We all go away, and for once,

    I hope we will always look back.
     
  2. Great poem Smighter! ;)
    I'm not sure of the rhythm but that might just be me being derpy... :?
     
  3. Weirdly, my eyes were watering at the end of the poem.
    That you for that poem, it was... I don't know how to explain it.
     
  4. Yeah, I messed up the rhythm. The first few lines don't follow it and a few lines in the poem don't either.

    I meant it to be sad, but I didn't expect it would get a reaction like that. Thank you.
     
  5. You're welcome.
    I hope that it was the poem actually causing that, but I guess I'll never know.
    These things do sometimes get to me, like a switch someone deep in my subconscious.
     
  6. I'm thinking of working on a story.

    So I'll cut to the chase and give a brief explanation on what I'm going to maybe base it around.



    I was possibly going to have 3-4 characters, they explore the world and go on adventures and stuff, and one day they hear about the ancient civilization, this ancient civilizationg vanished thousands of years ago without a trace, but left behind technology really advanced for their time, like (steampunk maybe?) airships and Automotons.

    The friends go on an adventure seeking out these ruins going off of very vague directions from an old book.

    On their travels they encounter ferocious beasts, carnivorous plants, harsh environments, and a booby-trap filled ruin.


    Now, I'm going to admit something, I am a furry, and I like the idea of basing the characters of of some characters I've thought up for this story, one being an anthropomorphic dragon (the leader) and 2 being an anthropomorphic wolf (possibly will be brother/sister) and if probably another one who is probably going to be either fox, some kind of canine, a dragon (although a different species of dragon from the other) or a reptile if some sort.


    But I'm not sure if anyone would like to see "Furry Characters" instead of humans.

    Also, this is a different universe per say, so don't expect it to be exactly like earth.

    I kinda have sone ideas for invironments from Avatar: The last airbender, skyrim and a few books I've read.

    For the characters I will probably do a character Bio thread so you can kind of get to know them more. (hoping to maybe not have to explain the characters a whole lot in the story by making that thread.)



    So how's it sound?
     
  7. Also this is technically my first story not written for school or anything, so I may need some pointers.
     
  8. Good luck.
    Try not to get ahead of yourself.
    I'm not a very good writer myself, but the first actual story I tried, I had SO many ideas for it, and I wanted to get them out there as quickly as possible.
    Basically, I stuffed all my ideas in too short of a time, and ran out of interesting ideas quickly. Not only that, but I put myself into a corner, and the story failed; it wasn't interesting to write about anymore.
    Try to pace yourself. In Chapter 1, this happens, Chapter 2, this happens...

    Personally, I like human characters; I've always disliked this "different species" thing, unless they're similar to humans. In the Trilogy of the VideoGame Mass Effect, and also in Star Wars, etc, many of the species were similar to humans, which I like. And since they were different species, there were many interesting mannerisms to explore, and character development was very interesting.
    But stories that the characters are rats or something, that's personally not as interesting to me, most of the time. An exception to that is the Bone series of comic books, but therre are also humans in that, so...

    Either way, Good Luck!
     
  9. Well they may not be Human but an Anthropomorphic creature is an animal with human-like traits.

    These guys will wear clothes, and walk in 2 legs, etc.
     
  10. And the environments will probably include Deserts, a jungle (some kind of forest), possibly a mountain with inclement weather, maybe a plain.

    It won't start out sudden, I'll try my best to make it transition smoothly.
     
  11. I dunno about dragon-people and stuff, but I think most people would be tolerant of one or two 'furry' races. That's just my thought, though.
     
  12. God... Where did everyone go?!
     
  13. Phoenix, tracing it back, it started with Seth then everything slowly degraded from there.

    Sucks.
     
  14. How long ago was that?
     
  15. I know its not Sunday, oh well...

     
  16. Can you continue it? o_O
     
  17. oh my god has anyone here read Will Grayson Will Grayson because dammit that's a freaking good book.

    also I'm cowriting an apocalypse-type book with my roommate.

    this concludes your sporadic visit from your friendly neighborhood queer.