The story of the future in my imagination

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by cheesecake71, Apr 29, 2011.

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  1. Last Epilogue: (Yumi)

    I knew that Stanford was still there, for every time Frankie and I went to cadets, we were able to see Stanford's spirit there.
     
    #41 cheesecake71, Apr 30, 2011
  2. Actually I'll call it "World War 3"
     
    #42 cheesecake71, Apr 30, 2011
  3. Any feedback at all?
     
    #43 cheesecake71, May 1, 2011
  4. How about..........War and blood.....or sumthing like that......?????? :)
     
    #44 Xx_SonuRules_xX, May 2, 2011
  5. Read my new thread "world war 4"
     
    #45 cheesecake71, May 2, 2011
  6. Ok but I think you need to explore more for example, if they need to explore an area tell u what it looks like what the characters thoughts are this will make it nicer to read because you get a picture of the area.
     
    #46 Hang_You_By_Your_Toes, May 3, 2011
  7. why are you dividing the chapters so wierdly?
     
    #47 ledhotchilizeppers, May 3, 2011
  8. Thx pie for being gentle. And thx for the advice but pls keep in mind that this is my first time doing this kind of stuff
     
    #48 cheesecake71, May 5, 2011
  9. Deleted chapter: (Frankie)

    I finally found what those flags were. They were the flags of a not-so-neutral Sweden. This is long after the war and Britain has beaten the Swedish army into submission so I was content.
     
    #49 cheesecake71, May 9, 2011
  10. I think chapters are too short. If that was a book it would not even be a page a chapter. You could definitely drag it out a lot and add more suspense and then it would be even better......
     
    #50 etak, Jun 6, 2011
  11. Very good though but too short!!!!
     
    #51 etak, Jun 6, 2011
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