The Sacred Gems of the Ancient feedback/discussion

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by cheesecake71, Mar 30, 2012.

  1. Really? Nothing?
  2. Why do the soldiers drop their swords before fighting?
  3. Nevermind, I re-read it, I think you need more detail, even that little amount of story could probably be twice as long... And like other said, it should be longer even just to be able to pull people in or away, hard to make a judgement on that.
  4. I've been trying to make the chapters longer.
  5. Chapter three posted. Feedback pls
  6. New chapter up, feedback pls
  7. I liked the prologue the best and I'm kinda liking the story. It's a bit all over the place but overall it's good.
  8. People pls be patient for the next chapter as I'm currently dealing with trolls