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Another one by me:
Not About hunger but please critique this one.

You
---
Eyes as deep
As the ocean sweet
Look so charming
But are disarming
Make me laugh
Make me cry
That's you

Striding like a buck
Strutting catching looks
You don't know
That my heart goes
When you pass by
I move and step aside
You make me laugh
Make me cry
That's you

Those sweet lips
Gave me trig tips
But now wrench in two
My heart loving you
With three simple words
I
Hate
YOU

 

lives are like a falling leaves
Slowly coming to there destination
So why must u leave me in despiration
To keep you in my possesion
Untill we reach our final destination
Please don't leave
All I want is to be happy
And have wonderful family
With you as there loving mother
So please don't leave me in this long journy
To our final destination

 

My first poem that I've shared with ppl

 

Do what do ya think

 

Bump for freaking awesomeness

 

K so do we have a palringo group yet?

 

Challenge please

 

Topic?

 

Interested intermediate

 

U want to do one now? I'll let u pick the topic.

 

Oh um ok:
Howling Anguish

 

Like a wolf
My heart howls
In deep
Black
Anguish
Like a wolf
My heart hungers
In deep
Black
Longing
Like a wolf
My heart sings
In deep
Black
Moonlight
Like a wolf
My heart howls
In deep
Black
Anguish
For you

 

I finally found you ww...I think...but I have bad news for you, and you may hate me for it too.

 

I think I finallly found you ww!!! But I have some bad news, and you may hate me for it

 

It did post the first time!!!

 

When will we have a palringo group? Want me to make it?

 

Oh wait, do I have to make some poetry to post here?

 

... Or go away. Don't post unless you are contributing to the forum.. That spazzing omg I found you goes on their wall.