The poetry wars sign up

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *lady-marian (01), Sep 25, 2010.

  1. I say we start a battle.
     
  2. I agree with irin
     
  3. Since this is a sign-up, get the real final battle of the war begin.
     
  4. That's a really good site I used it in school last year
     
  5. New topic for anyone!
    No time limit!
    Topic: hungry

    Here's my entry:

    Hunger

    I hunger


    You have GOT to admit, that is deep! I'm serious, not joking.
     
  6. K so srry I have been suuuuper busy lately and haven't had time to write. I m auditioning for a school in the creative writing section and I'm gonna write more poems. So please DONT BE STINGY WITH YOUR COMMENTS EVEN BAD ONES PLEASE~ I would greatly appreciate it
     
  7. K so here's mine:
     
  8. Hungering
    ---
    Swirling seeping
    Twirling deepening
    Black tunnel of my heart
    Deep shadows wrenched apart
    Deepening and seeping
    Hunger like ink weeping
    Weeping from my heart
    I hunger for you
    I yearn for your gentle eyes
    I desire your loving vice
    But greater still
    Is my unconditional
    Unfufilling
    Forever
    Hunger for you
    Deep love like no other
    Greater than fathers to mother
    You will never know
    That in this unceasing flow
    I shan't change my ways
    But your heart is an unending maze
    And I am starving to death
    In my hunger for you
     
  9. Wow! That was AWESOME! It might even beat mine.

    I hunger is so meaningful, because it could mean hunger for anything!
     
  10. Those are both amazing! I especially love the simplicity of both, especially lady's.
    I took a different approach.


    I hunger.
    For the love of my parents,
    For the cake that holds five candles,
    For the wish I make as I blow them out.
    I hunger for the presants my parents are hiding in the closet.
    I hunger for more time to play with my new toys.

    I hunger.
    For more sleep as my mother tries to wake me up.
    For chocolate chip cookies for breakfast.
    I hunger for my home as I walk into the classroom.
    For attention as the teacher passes me by.
    For friendship. 
    I hunger for the paintbrush at craft time.
    I hunger for lunch.
    I hunger for the brownie my new friend is eating.
    For more time at school when my mom picks me up. 
    I hunger still as years pass by.

    I hunger.
    For a new science partner. 
    For a spot on the cheerleading team.
    For a sweet sixteen party. 
    I hunger for the boy that every girl wants to date. 
    For my little brother to stay out of my room.
    For my best friend to come over for a sleep over and do my nails.

    I hunger.
    For a scholarship from my dream collage. 
    For that one boy to notice me.
    For a better job that doesn't pay minimal wage. 
    For my friend to return my calls.
    For independence from my parents who don't understand.

    I hunger.
    For a new collage roomate who doesn't steal my clothes.
    For an English class that doesn't start at 8:00 in the morning. 
    For an A on my mid-terms.
    I hunger for a new car and a designer handbag.

    I hunger.
    For the collage diploma in my principal's hand.

    I hunger.
    For a raise at my new job.
    For someone to share my apartment with. 
    For someone to love me.
    I hunger do a second date.
    I hunger for a third date.
    I hunger for him to pop the question.
    I hunger for a fabulous wedding dress.
    For a perfect wedding and honeymoon.

    I hunger.
    For a child.
    For a baby girl. 
    I hunger, and wish I could have a child, even though I can't.

    I hunger. 
    For life, for love.
    For my husband.
    For his funeral to end.
    For the tears to stop flowing. 

    I hunger.
    For retirement.
    I hunger for fun.
    For all the time I spent, worrying about things that didn't matter.
    For all the happy memories.
    For youth, though I know I can't have it. 

    I hunger.
    To get out of this hospital bed.
    For the pain to stop.
    I hunger for someone to hold my hand as I slip away.
    I hunger for death.

    10/12/10  
     
  11. I hunger for life to end
    my broken heart
    never to mend
    it burns my soul
    like hot coal
    i lived my life
    with my perfect wife
    a life full of
    woe and strife
    and now I ask my wife
    just end my life
    as she grabs the knife
     
  12. Wow. Those were both good!
     
  13. Interested
    beginner
     
  14. I want a new topic please~
     
  15. I hunger for understanding
    For knowing more than just skin deep
    For compassion
    For love
    For understanding is knowing more than you wanted
    I hunger for dreams
    For wishes and wants
    For imagination at work
    For chasing dreams is what sets you free
    Sorry for the random post never have really done poetry but what do you think all criticism is accepted
     
  16. Hmm not bad work on your stanza arrangements and length. Make the syllables per stanza semi even. Pretty good tho