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Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *lady-marian (01), Sep 25, 2010.

  1. Sorry guys!! This is a not that great poem!! It needs lots of work!! And I hate the last line!! Haha
     
  2. It burns your soul like fire and ice
    It holds you in it's iron vice
    For those who wake The Beast of Hate
    Prepare for doom and reap the price

    For once awake it never rests
    The anger burns inside it's chest
    For those who wake The Beast of Hate 
    Be warned, it never fails it's quest

    I warn you now, so you can run
    Your curse has only just begun
    For you awoke The Beast of Hate
    And now your cheating days are done

    You took my heart and made it crack
    I gave my soul you gave it back
    And now The Beast of Hate has stirred
    And wants Your heart for it's next snack 
     
  3. And both of yours were excellent!!! XDXD lady I loved yours!! Such vivid images!!!
     
  4. What about mine? :cry: :(
     
  5. I luv urs reapal!!! Ur really gd at writing poems!!!
     
  6. Oh!! Kimber I didn't see yours!!! Did you post one for hate?! Sorry!! 
     
  7. well not for hate for capture
     
  8. Oh!! I just read your captured one kimber!! Really good!! Your excellent at free verse!!!! My only problem would be...it seems more a poem about being trapped then captured. But it's still great!! XDXD ( I hate critisizing people)
     
  9. Captured

    Why
    Why am I here,
    In this place,
    Alone.

    I am caught-
    Agian.
    Stuffed into a cage,
    Kept till I die.

    Only hope is light,
    Yet there is none.
    No light in this cage, this hole of doom.

    I collapse apon myself.
    Nothing matters anymore.
    Glowing hands grab me,
    And I am lifted up to light.

    She dies at the end, btw. It's nowhere near my best work but I tried!
     
  10. Nice work everyone! Let's end the day with the topic fear, hey going, no time limit
     
  11. Fear

    Fear is cold, colder than ice
    It clutches you in it's grasp
    It won't ever let you go
    How long will you hold on?
    Something deep inside
    Older than life itself
    Will keep you alive
    But you will freeze
    In the cold entaglements
    That fear hold you in
    Life fading, apathy engaging
    Hope and dreams splintering
    Lonely and confused
    Is what fear makes you 
    It molds you like clay
    So afraid, for what might happen
    You can destroy the fear
    But it will grow back stronger
    You'll waste every last moment 
    Trying hoplessly to untagle the fear
    But success is impossible
    For fear is everywhere
     
  12. Fear...
    You shiver
    You worry
    You are afraid so you scurry

    Fear...
    You run
    You hide
    It's a feeling that's is locked deep inside

    Fear...
    You scream
    You cry
    To lose it you may even lie
     
  13. Fear Continued

    Fear...
    You get tricked
    You burn
    For reasons some may never learn

    Fear...
    You try
    You fail
    You'll never escape the horrible jail

    Fear...
    You hurt
    You're sly
    In a game that won't end in a tie
     
  14. Fear Continued

    Fear...
    In your final breath
    You take one last step
    And defeat fear with a smile on your face
     
  15. It's great, I'd like to see it posted as a whole though
     
  16. Goodnight everyone! 