The edge beckons as I draw near My heart beats fast, consumed by fear My feet inch forward nearing the lip One wrong move and forward I'd tip Downward I'd fall, into the gloom In the gray shadows, id fall to my doom Spinning and twirling my body descends And down in the darkness my journey would end So slowly I move, stepping with care Until my feet feel nothing but air And then I pause to see what's below The darkness hiding invisible foes And forward I teeter, poised on the edge Desperately trying to stay on the ledge Held up by the winds, pushing me back Until the winds stop, and my body goes slack Then I feel my feet slip And the ledge seems to dip And I fall into space Into chasms embrace But I wave my arms and try to fight Before I am pulled out of sight You dont hear me land, but you know that I fall For rising from below, you hear my last call.
Oops! Didn't see that! It was epic Reapel! I don't understand why you thunk it's bad, although I agree, the topic was hard. Everyone vote!
Im really sorry lady but i vote for reapel. the poem was a bit easier to understand but i liked the hidden meaning in yours.
The reason I didnt use" journey ends" was because it didn't go with the rythm and for foes and below I was rhyming the vowels not the end!! But thanks for the input!!! XDXZ
It still flows imo And i understand the foes and below but seeing as the rest was rhymes of the end it felt off
Klassik I agree! haha that's what happens when you only have a short time to write it!! Now someone else compete!!! I wanna hear more poems!! XDXD