Literally this is the worst story in FF, it made me laugh, but I was laughing that some one could be stupid enough to write this. As I was reading I was thinking only an idiot could think this would be even remotely acceptable. Just stop writing for the sake of everyone here.
WHOA WHOA WHOA! THIS IS NOT THE WORST STORY. I'VE SEEN MUCH WORSE. Don't be so hard on her. Yes, she needs constructive criticism. No, you don't have to be SO harsh that it destroys her self confidence and causes her to commit suicide or worse.
the story itself wasn't even funny. ignoring the structure and layout of the story itself. it wasn't well thought out or clever. it was a stupid garbage story. @firerock I call it like I see it. and this story was crap