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Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by FeatherHunter, Jan 9, 2011.

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  1. Smighter is our winner!
    But is it ice, snow, or both???????
    YOU will NOT decide...
    Lol
     
    #381 FeatherHunter, May 31, 2011
  2. Snow. You said solid, GAS(sh), and liquid. >:O
     
    #382 Smighter89, May 31, 2011
  3. Never mind, smighter is wrong now.
     
    #383 FeatherHunter, May 31, 2011
  4. D: Then both. Sleet?
     
    #384 Smighter89, Jun 1, 2011
  5. I still say steam
     
    #385 Eagleking, Jun 1, 2011
  6. Eagle is wrong and smighter is too
     
    #386 FeatherHunter, Jun 1, 2011
  7. Ice.
     
    #387 Smighter89, Jun 1, 2011
  8. Smighter is correct.
     
    #388 FeatherHunter, Jun 1, 2011
  9. Awesome
     
    #389 Eagleking, Jun 1, 2011
  10. New chapter is up
     
    #390 FeatherHunter, Jun 1, 2011
  11. Star is mean :(
     
    #391 lllll-llllChadIIII-IIIII, Jun 1, 2011
  12. What'd he do?
     
    #392 *TheBlackRage (01), Jun 2, 2011
  13. Your using more kaedus than Angel.. :(
     
    #393 Empress_of_Shadows, Jun 2, 2011
  14. Kaedus is fending off the centurion right now! Protecting your ass!
    You could send clones to help though!
     
    #394 FeatherHunter, Jun 2, 2011
  15. mmm the storyline seems like its really flourishing. I'd say to too many book excerpts. Also, when it comes to transitions from one place to another, it'd be nice to differentiate a little more (ie use squigly lines etc.). Also, the enter space is your friend. Its easier to read if there's some more spacing here and there. It adds a little neater/more organized interface for the readers and helps unclog the heavy reading parts. Otherwise its very creative and developing steadily. Also, dont stray too much from one setting... Say follow like two or three different situations as to not get too confusing. Overall its coming along nice though.

    iZaln
     
    #395 Nlaz, Jun 2, 2011
  16. Thanks!
     
    #396 FeatherHunter, Jun 2, 2011
  17. No problem. That'll be 5 cents now. Everyday, interest adds another cent.

    iZ
     
    #397 Nlaz, Jun 2, 2011
  18. 0.0 Did NOT expect that.
     
    #398 Smighter89, Jun 2, 2011
  19. If my parents walked in right now I would be pretending to sleep with a huge smile on my face. 
     
    #399 Smighter89, Jun 2, 2011
  20. Told you you're my plot twist
     
    #400 FeatherHunter, Jun 2, 2011
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