the apocalypse feedback thread

This dalton guy should never die NEVER

 

That plmparoo guy has an awesome username

 

Yes yes I do

 

It's a crappy story with no decent characters, a barely-developed plot, and mediocre writing skills at best.

Merely my two cents.

 

It's not bad just undeveloped I would say

 

Bland writing with little to no thought or proof reading.
Boring plot with little development.
Little forethought or apparently, after thought.
Severe lack of engagement due lack of description.
Rushed.
Doesn't ease reader into story.
Dialogue is lacking any form of character.
Shocking lack of any character.

 

Yeah you need to go into more detail. Description and shiz.

 

Is the next part coming?

 

Great job!! Can't wait for more just saying the ur Brittany character should never die LOL

 

Stealing my ideas of using alts to keep characters alive :lol:

 

Aww

 

You should try to write more when you have the chance

 

And you should stop bumping old threads.

 

This is still relevant therefore not a necrobump

 

Since when are you an expert?

The last post was September 7 and it was November 11 when you bumped the thread. That was 2 months ago. Not to mention I can't find the story in the first five pages of Fan Fiction. (Although that may be just me, why don't you go check.)

And it's mot just this thread. Two other threads, both about a month old, you bumped, one to continue an argument and one to just say "I gave up on it"