Taking Flight Feedback

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Smighter89, Mar 31, 2013.

  1. Nice, want MORE
     
  2. Here's another chapter, it's a little shorter than the next few. It looks long, but it just has a lot of dialogue.

    Feedback appreciated, especially in the form of criticism. (But not in the form of trolling.)
     
  3. SUPER happy you choose to do Phantom of the Opera. I absolutely love it.

    The story is really good so far. Keep it up Smighter, I love this one. Few errors but hey, mistakes happen. I'd give it 9/10 so far. Keep it up!

    Oh, did you know there's a sequel to Phantom of the Opera?
     
  4. Yeah, Love Never Dies :)
     
  5. Another chapter even though I haven't even finished the next one yet.

    Writing is starting to get easier, starting to.

    Enjoy? It's a little short, again.
     
  6. Also, thank you Tiger for always be here for me and reading/feedbacking.

    Eh I need to stop posting and sleep. But I'm not tired. Yes you are.
     
  7. I like it and want moaaar!
     
  8. Still like it a lot
     
  9. Interesting story so far, looking forward to reading more.
     
  10. You've cleaned up a lot of the errors after the beginning: HOWEVER, I enjoy going back and rereadinging things. I think you would profit most if you cleaned the blocks of description for new and re-readers.

    The story seems nice, but I can't sit down and read a story with seemingly realistic people in it (even though most 8th graders are not six feet tall). It's just a personal prefrence, and sucks that I can't read these. Genetics suck.

    Keep it up, blah blah blah, go back and fix the first stuff if you have a computer and are not too lazy, blah blah blah. Have a nice life if I never talk to you again.
     
  11. I'm bumping this so you post more Smighter... It's a good story, and I don't want it to die
     
  12. Another chapter, why not.
     
  13. Eh I should have added like a, "Leaving Icarus out in the swirling fog" or something.

    I'll have to fix that tomorrow. I'm sleepy.
     
  14. Another good chapter! :)