Some of my poems and thought

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by colonial, Dec 9, 2009.

  1. I have forgotten my youth.
    Months and years have eroded my life
    like a sand bar pounded constantly

    Was I young? I can't remember tossed and turned in hours and minutes that measure my life.

    My youth, Lost maybe? What makes us old? The constant sound of the Tic Toc
    reverberates around my head .

    I sense death at every turn, but my clock continues to Click the hours of the day like a melodrome , keeping a beat for me to follow.

    Counting down the moments of my life.
    I can't sleep anymore. I don't wanna wake up dead! Or am I already?
     
  2. It's alright. I just liked how you incorporated a lot of abstract objects in your poetry.
     
  3. That was pretty good! I like it!

    Maybe I could try to write something, but I won't promis anything. If I can write something good, then I will pass it on to you.
     
  4. Thanks! Don't think about it too much. Let it come to you.
     
  5. Thanks. I probably won't get it to you anytime soon, but it might help if you could describe for me what your looking for?
     
  6. I can relate to that poem a lot, being in foster care and abused and taken advantage of by two girls. And being there because of an abusive alcoholic dad. But I got out, my mom got us back. But I can't get it out of my head, none of it. It like I can't remember my younger times. And I'm going to 11th soon, and have a not so great relationship with my family. Eachday I wonder why I don't just kill myself...because I'm already dead arnt I?
     
  7. @killzone Things will get better. Don't kill yourself. That is one mistake that you don't get a chance to fix. Killing yourself is final, and once you do it, everything is gone. The ride might be bumpy now, but you gotta hang on. In the end, it'll be worth it, if you make it worth it.
     
  8. killzone, visit my hug thread :)
     
  9. Yay!! I've made a difference!



    I'll get working on more poems and entries than
     
  10. Killzone, here's a poem for you. Hope this helps. 

    Number 9

    THE JOURNEY

    Quietly we start
    Not always we accept
    The travel through life
    We all depart
    In the begining
    Everything is simple
    We see the world
    Through the same eyes
    Carefree we go

    Learning more and more
    Each day
    We witness the world
    In different ways
    Discovering emotions
    We never knew
    Some we like
    And some that sting
    And gaining memories
    Of friends and family
    We cherish throughout
    The years

    Towards the end
    We look back
    Remembering the 
    Time we had
    The joys
    And sorrow
    This journey produced
    Leaving a legacy
    Of what we did
    On this jorney-
    A journey called life 
     
  11. Plz read these and post what u thought of them
     
  12. That was good!

    I guess it sort of helped
    I just wish I could go to the past and change everything

    Eachday I have flashbacks of what happened
    And I just wish it was over and out of my head
    But eachday I have to relive it over and over again.

    I wake up eachday asking myself if I should and eachday I try.

    I just wish it stopped.

    But thanks everybody

    Thanks colonial!
     
  13. Oogway: Quit, don't quit? Noodles, don't noodles? You are too concerned about what was and what will be. There is a saying: yesterday is history, tomorrow is a mystery, but today is a gift. That is why it is called the "present."
     
  14. For killzone
     
  15. Colonial is right. Don't quit. Just remember all the small hidden suprises in each day.
     
  16. That is an amazing movie. Kung-Fu Panda
     
  17. I havnt seen it yet, but I'm planning to.
     
  18. It's hilarious
     
  19. That's my favorite line from the movie