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Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by bellalautner, Jun 24, 2011.

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  1. Thank uis tgeir anything u think i should add orchange?
     
    #21 bellalautner, Jul 1, 2011
  2. *or change
     
    #22 bellalautner, Jul 1, 2011
  3. i dunno.
    it was good for me.
     
    #23 lIlIlIlI-CoS-NiTRO-IlIlIlIl, Jul 1, 2011
  4. Feedback:

    What you need:
    Proofreading (check spelling and reading it out loud) it doesn't flow very well.
    More variety vocabulary wise
    More description
    Explanations. I know it's not that far into the story, but you need to delve more deeply into the characters' relationships
     
    #24 *iPimella (01), Jul 1, 2011
  5. ... Ok how about a flashback about Ella's past that sound good and I will try 2 make it Flow more
     
    #25 bellalautner, Jul 2, 2011
  6. This is good but is it broken into chapters? Please watch ur grammer
     
    #26 *Doctor_Fred_Weasley (01), Jul 2, 2011
  7. Ikr it's mainly spell check lol
     
    #27 bellalautner, Jul 2, 2011
  8. I like it
     
    #28 Maisaka, Jul 2, 2011
  9. Thxs
     
    #29 bellalautner, Jul 4, 2011
  10. Finish it :mad: or get a better ending sis
     
    #30 Maisaka, Jul 4, 2011
  11. ...thxs
     
    #31 bellalautner, Jul 4, 2011
  12. Bump
     
    #32 bellalautner, Aug 15, 2011
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