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Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by cheesemuffin, Feb 9, 2011.

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  1. slightly confusing...i hope the next chapter will clarify :)
     
    #121 Storallelite, Mar 1, 2011
  2. Confusing?

    I just revealed who the Figure was!

    Recap: Irin explains that she's an archangel (slo-mo-able supersoldier) and the figure used SloMotion to hijack the gunship, patched into Sam's radio feed, and said.

    "...Your MAJESTY has arrived!"
     
    #122 cheesemuffin, Mar 3, 2011
  3. -.- So I'm dead? (Most likely?)
     
    #123 *Spottedleaf2 (01), Mar 3, 2011
  4. I never said you were, now did I?

    Just because you were in an explosion doesn't mean you died.
     
    #124 cheesemuffin, Mar 3, 2011
  5. Irin's an archangel?
     
    #125 Storallelite, Mar 3, 2011
  6. .... Yes.

    When Sam asks "What about this spy stuff, Irin?"

    She explains the Archangel project, and therefore she is one. See?
     
    #126 cheesemuffin, Mar 3, 2011
  7. ahhh...i am slow :cry:
     
    #127 Storallelite, Mar 3, 2011
  8. Not slow. Just confused. At one point, even I didn't understand Revolution 
     
    #128 cheesemuffin, Mar 4, 2011
  9. Lol
     
    #129 FeatherHunter, Mar 4, 2011
  10. FRIGGING SPELLCHECK!

    *lunged - pinged
     
    #130 cheesemuffin, Mar 4, 2011
  11. good story so far! you should add me ;)
     
    #131 THEBlade, Mar 4, 2011
  12. NO
     
    #132 cheesemuffin, Mar 4, 2011
  13. I am disappoint. You never used me 
     
    #133 *iPimella (01), Mar 4, 2011
  14. DX

    I can't put everyone in at the same time! And GlooMi... Should I use Mystique or GlooMi as the name?

    Please forgive me, I'm not the best planner... Or writer, lol.
     
    #134 cheesemuffin, Mar 4, 2011
  15. Nice post but I think I need to reread salvation i keep getting confused...
     
    #135 Storallelite, Mar 4, 2011
  16. Just felt like bumping le storeh
     
    #136 cheesemuffin, Mar 10, 2011
  17. xD whenever I see the word spot I think of me lol! But anyway... It's coming along pretty well cheese! Good job so far!
     
    #137 *Spottedleaf2 (01), Mar 11, 2011
  18. I think the story is great, but the posts need to be longer. The short post are confusing to me. Other than that, I think it's great. Please post more soon.
     
    #138 *Irin (01), Mar 11, 2011
  19. Well, the short posts are usually just bumps to keep me from forgetting Salvation.

    I can try to make them longer
     
    #139 cheesemuffin, Mar 11, 2011
  20. A new legit part is up :D
     
    #140 cheesemuffin, Mar 11, 2011
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