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Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by cheesemuffin, Aug 11, 2011.

  1. Cheese, my profile was entered in this morning, can he get in?
     
  2. Phoenix, mine was 3 days ago and I haven't whined. You likely aren't going to be in. Asking crushed the the little chance you had.
     
  3. La Plata Panda es correcta
     
  4. >:D I'm right AND I understand Spanish 
     
  5. New chapter coming right up. Just gonna eats me a sammich.

    I needs meh writing food.
     
  6. Revolution fuel
     
  7. Viva la revelation!!
     
  8. Revelation =/= Revolution

    JOO FAILZ
     
  9. It's up! Expect the story to be just under 20 posts long.

    There will be a sequel, though
     
  10. : D A SEQUEL?! And I loved the part where I threw the Smammer into the face of Z'uthemark. XD Great chapter, keep up the description. 
     
  11. Intense chapter can't wait for the next one keep posting it's great so far!
     
  12. Great chapter, Cheese ^^ Just wish I coulda used my slave more before you kill him off... ohwell, I've made a little sub-chapter out of boredom, lemmie know what ya think ;)


    Wrathbane Callously regarded his dead slave, sneering at it's incompetence.

    "Slain by a few weaklings..." He said to himself, each word full of disdain.

    He held out his hand, a black light shimmered there, flickering anxiously. Full of power, malice and.... something else.

    Fear.

    "I had expected more of you, Z'uthmerak. I had not spared you had I known you were so useless."

    A monstrous, strangely warped voice wailed in panic. Powerful as it was, this spirit-thing was no match for the moderator. "Forgive me, master! They... they were to many.. I-"

    "Silence. I tire of your incompetence. Perhaps you will serve me better in death..." With a flick of his wrist, he summoned his blade. Then, quicker then the eye could follow, Wrathbane cut through the sphere.

    He smiled coldly as it's essence was absorbed into his sword, adding to his strength...
     
  13. Darn my sleepy spelling mistakes!! 
     
  14. Many interesting developments, great chapter
     
  15. New chapter.

    It's not a good one D:
     
  16. Reading.  Battery may run out.
     
  17. Good Chapter, just needed some action. But I think it was meant to not have any action.
     
  18. Good I like it but when are you adding the other chars. I know you are working hard on this so take your time
     
  19. I'm not.

    There is at best a 3% chance of me putting in ANY new characters.

    And asking instantly halves your chances, so you have a 1.5% chance.