No Longer Human: Feedback

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *iPimella (01), Aug 13, 2010.

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  1. Dylans neutral
     
    #41 CrayzJayz, Aug 19, 2010
  2. Oh ok
     
    #42 detroit-lions-fan, Aug 19, 2010
  3. Yes my dude made it in GO MATT!!!
    ps:good job gloomi it's a really good story
     
    #43 german_idiot, Aug 19, 2010
  4. Hey gloomi can my dude Matt and blade fight just a thought
     
    #44 german_idiot, Aug 19, 2010
  5. Yay! Good chapter
     
    #45 *Utho (01), Aug 19, 2010
  6. When's the next chapter coming this is an addicting book, novel,......thingy.
     
    #46 german_idiot, Aug 19, 2010
  7. Tomorrow or Saturday thanks for the feedback everyone!
     
    #47 *iPimella (01), Aug 19, 2010
  8. I like it I made a big boom
     
    #48 dut, Aug 19, 2010
  9. Yeah I hope you don't mind that I changed the name
     
    #49 *iPimella (01), Aug 20, 2010
  10. I like how u put real personalities in them ur really good at this gloomi
     
    #50 german_idiot, Aug 20, 2010
  11. Thanks since I'm writing in 1st person, I try to focus alot on the supporting characters to add more flavor. Thank you all for the feedback. Also check out my writing guide I worked really hard on it and I want some feedback on that as well. Thanks all! This is GlooMi signing off
     
    #51 *iPimella (01), Aug 20, 2010
  12. What's ur dudes name again I forget
     
    #52 german_idiot, Aug 20, 2010
  13. Which dude? Esh?
     
    #53 *iPimella (01), Aug 20, 2010
  14. Nevermind I just realized ur writing the story from a few first person views like esh and irian that's hard to do that man
     
    #54 german_idiot, Aug 20, 2010
  15. Not Esh just Irian and Aynia
     
    #55 *iPimella (01), Aug 20, 2010
  16. Oh ok well I got the multiple 1st person views down so yeah.......
     
    #56 german_idiot, Aug 20, 2010
  17. Sorry if that was a little confusing, I wrote the names down under the chapter number.
     
    #57 *iPimella (01), Aug 20, 2010
  18. I was wondering why those were there thanks for clearing that up
     
    #58 german_idiot, Aug 20, 2010
  19. Whens the next update?
     
    #59 DarkFalcon, Aug 20, 2010
  20. Today or tomorrow falcon who knows he may b writing it now
     
    #60 german_idiot, Aug 20, 2010
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