LoKaW Feedback - Both Versions

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by cheesemuffin, Dec 27, 2011.

  1. Just another noob posting on the story.... -____-
     
  2. I remember that one guy who posted on one of my stories, but he did it with good intent.

    It was a whole new chapter, but way OffTopic. I appreciated it, but nonetheless, got his post deleted.
     
  3. New installment. Feedback please ;)
     
  4. Newest chapter was ok, I got a bit lost in the middle though.
     
  5. Swabia lololol
     
  6. Elaborate on lost. I'm trying to work on coherence.

    If you look at the map, there's a huge skull in the lowlands. While Featherus wan on the back of Ahdragos, he saw faint lights, and shadows moving. It was the skull. It's hard to explain, but i can if needed.
     
  7. Yeah that cleared it up a bit
     
  8. Are both the stories gonna be around the same length?
     
  9. Is the skull an evil villain lair?
     
  10. Did you not read the story? Don't you know what nefarious means?
     
  11. I'll be posting the next chapter of LoKaW soon.

    I didn't forget about it, I just got sick again, and I've been busy. Unfortunately, Wattpad is far from making iDevice posting possible, so for now I'll just post here.

    You guys are the only reason I still write :)
     
  12. YAY!!!!  MOAR!
     
  13. I've been dealing with so much lately...

    Idk when I'll finish this next one...
     
  14. Don't worry about it.
     
  15. Bump for the new chapter.
     
  16. I forgot to leave feedback O_0

    Good story, the story is kind of jumping around to different events though. It feels like it is a bunch of random events or chats in order of time. Though it is related, but time skips every chapter slightly irritates me. Though it feels it is going to come out well.

    I love how you are able to incorporate so many KaW features into the story. I also like the certain names, but that has been a common trend. Still like it though :-D

    Longest feedback I have given. Now for the ceremonial moar.


    MOAR. DX
     
  17. Anyone notice the writer Café disappeared?
     
  18. It's good. Need more to judge by though