LoKaW Feedback - Both Versions

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by cheesemuffin, Dec 27, 2011.

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  1. *Ahem*
     
    #281 cheesemuffin, Mar 21, 2012
  2. You should get a doctor to look at that cough :p
     
    #282 Eagleking, Mar 22, 2012
  3. And the update was good.
     
    #283 Eagleking, Mar 22, 2012
  4. Wow... I just noticed the update.


    Good, you gave great description and sum phunneh lienz.
     
    #284 Bonfifi, Mar 22, 2012
  5. *AHEM*
    *COUGH*
    *HACK*

    *dies*
     
    #285 cheesemuffin, Mar 22, 2012
  6. Dying is like falling asleep... But completely different :3
     
    #286 Eagleking, Mar 22, 2012
  7. Why is Tigris the only one that gave feedback for my latest update? -.-
     
    #287 FeatherHunter, Mar 25, 2012
  8. Just read feather's version, very good description. I could fully imagine everything. Only thing about it is that I was confused who the characters were at the beginning. You should have maybe made it a bit clearer.
     
    #288 Storallelite, Mar 25, 2012
  9. I took some inspiration from Cassandra Clare. If you;ve read any of the Mortal Instruments series, you'll notice how she sometime hid her characters until the end [of a chapter], that way you'd be shock to learn who they are.
     
    #289 FeatherHunter, Mar 25, 2012
  10. I'm afraid I haven't
     
    #290 Storallelite, Mar 26, 2012
  11. :O You haven't read the Mortal Instruments?! What about the Infernal Devices, the prequel to the Mortal Instruments?!
     
    #291 FeatherHunter, Mar 26, 2012
  12. Nope
     
    #292 Storallelite, Mar 26, 2012
  13. Just read your latest chapter cheese, srry I'm late. This one is better, a bit more description. Still too short though :'(
     
    #293 Storallelite, Mar 26, 2012
  14. I will work on this next chapter for not one, but TWO nights!

    That's ONE HALF HOUR of writing, not fifteen minutes!

    You all got that?
     
    #294 cheesemuffin, Mar 28, 2012
  15. :O
     
    #295 Bonfifi, Mar 28, 2012
  16. Holy nuggets! :O
     
    #296 Eagleking, Mar 28, 2012
  17. One half hour and you usually only spend 15 minutes writing a chapter?....I usually spend half an hour to an hour writing a chapter But if it'll be longer and better...YAY!! Hurry up and start cheese lol
     
    #297 Storallelite, Mar 28, 2012
  18. Wow Stora. It's a must-read series, not even kidding!
     
    #298 FeatherHunter, Mar 28, 2012
  19. I've never read it. Still reading Shogun
     
    #299 cheesemuffin, Mar 28, 2012
  20. Hmm...maybe I'll read it but right now I just started reading the Keys to the kingdom series.
     
    #300 Storallelite, Mar 29, 2012
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