As I have my hands in they're cold metal cuffs my feet been scraped on the stone floor as my feet bleed from my scrapes I then let out a hiss of my pain I asked them "why Im here?" they just replied "cause you ran if with stolen food from different families." I cry for where I have to go they then threw me in the cell but a olive colored old skeleton with cold metal shackles I then look at it and gasped to see what they did to him I saw the marks from razor blades when he died probably a man scraped the bones to get nothing but pleasure I then was lonely until I saw the princess with a pink and whit dress with braids on her hair and I then saw my shirt was now small as I saw a dagger I then cut small holes to get it a little comfortable but I won't get out the skeleton made me braver but I won't be let go
In that ENTIRE POST, there was ONE period. Also, They're - they are Their - BELONGING TO THEM There - AT A PLACE And in addition to that, keep the tense the same. Don't go straight from 'I am' to 'I did.' You are not a time traveler.
Haters, maybe guys story isn't perfect, but if don't like it, write your own story!! XD It's fun, and there few of them.
So, we're haters for trying to help OP fix his grammar? Also, I don't like it, and I HAVE written my own. Several, in fact. Have you?
here 2 choices 1.a lounge or bar or coffee place 2.we figure out something to turn this trash into something great
Cheesemuffin sorry to offend you ^-^ I meant it as a friendly suggestion, because it was irritating to watch a huge argument play out at the top of the list.. Do you know what page your stories are on?? I hear they are pretty good. And thanks Hulkzord ^o^