LET ME GO

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *hulkzord (01), Oct 22, 2012.

  1. You have been... But rectify that by not posing any more threads, and then reading the books.
     
  2. Candidus is right. The reason we're harsh on newcomers is to encourage improvement. If you show you're willing to get better, we'll help you out. But all you've done is whine about how mean our comments are, and then went on to make four more gibberish-ridden... Things.
     
  3. Look at Princesses story. That is a good remake of your story. Check it out.
     
  4. sorry I was mad at school I really meant to put I can't find it and I don't want to gojail for copying the book since that's what it sounded like you said
     
  5. You copied a book? What?
    I don't understand. What is the connection between being mad at school and...
     
  6. no i didn't I don't want to copy a book
     
  7. So whatever gave you that notion?!
     
  8. it sounded like it
     
  9. What sounded like what???
     
  10. as soon as the Doctor says you are feeling better, they will let you out of the little white room, and custom strait jacket !
     
  11. 1) Your a noob
    2) Stories are impossible to read
    3) You bumped several Threads
    4) Grammar errors everywhere
    5) I am starting to dislike you....
     
  12. Im trying my best and Ima noon 1.Im trying to get what every thing is
    2.Im just not good I can't just quit I got 3 helpers and they're helping me already .
     
  13. Im going to fix this story
     
  14. I been in this black and grey cell with a olive colored old skeleton that hangs on his hands with a dull yellow triangles cold metal bracelet that shows he's been here since I was born he makes me feel like Im not alone which I talk to every day I talk to him about my family and how my life been before I was here how I had a closet and a soft bed with the softest pillow made of straw and my loving father and mother and brother and sister and a black dog with a white star on his head that was sweet and I named him starlight but he's silent to the guards but to me he talks to me but I still is sad that they say soon but never happens I still scream:"LET ME GO!!" or "IM GONNA LOSE IT IF YOU DON'T LET ME GO!!"
     
  15. I've been in this black and grey cell with a olive colored old skeleton that hangs on his hands with a dull yellow triangles cold metal bracelet that shows he's been here since I was born he makes me feel like Im not alone which I talk to every day I talk to him about my family and how my life been before I was here how I had a closet and a soft bed with the softest pillow made of straw and my loving father and mother and brother and sister and a black dog with a white star on his head that was sweet and I named him starlight but he's silent to the guards but to me he talks to me but I'm still is sad that they say soon butit never happens I still scream:"LET ME GO!!" or "IM GONNA LOSE IT IF YOU DON'T LET ME GO!!"
     
  16. do you see anything wrong except the grammer
     
  17. only on the second post not the first post
     
  18. As I have my hands in they're cold metal cuffs my feet been scraped on the stone floor as my feet bleed from my scrapes I then let out a hiss of my pain I asked them "why Im here?" they just replied "cause you ran if with stolen food from different families." I cry for where I have to go they then threw me in the cell but a olive colored old skeleton with cold metal shackles I then look at it and gasped to see what they did to him I saw the marks from razor blades when he died probably a man
     
  19. oops messed up
     
  20. As I have my hands in they're cold metal cuffs my feet been scraped on the stone floor as my feet bleed from my scrapes I then let out a hiss of my pain I asked them "why Im here?" they just replied "cause you ran if with stolen food from different families." I cry for where I have to go they then threw me in the cell but a olive colored old skeleton with cold metal shackles I then look at it and gasped to see what they did to him I saw the marks from razor blades when he died probably a man scraped the bones to get nothing but pleasure I then was lonely until I saw the princess with a pink and whit dress with braids on her hair and I then saw my shirt