Yo, I'll help as an editor. I'm not gonna jump into Bastion's business, I'm just gonna read and edit if y'all don't mind. iZ
@iBast Story This is the second war story in a row where Rika pwns me. The other was Colonials. Anyway, I know you want to pwn
*me in real life, but... Lolz just kiddin. Nice story. Imma liking it. The closest I ever got to for a war story was either Kingdoms at War or the WarZone. iZ
Sure Zaln you can be an editor. And I just inserted a random friends name, it wont really be rika. Anything to improve upon? tell me now because im going to post it up.
Ok edited version. "You ready for this?" Zaln screamed over the roar of the chopper. "Definitely." Replied Bastion. Suddenly, the chopper stood still, and a rope dropped from it. "Go, go, go!" yelled the pilot from the front seat. One by one, Zaln, Bastion, and McGreen grappled down it. When they all finally safetly reach ground level, they rushed behind a car and surveyed their surroundings. All around them there was members of the infamous NRA (New Revolution Army) shooting their AK-47's at Group Gold, the second group assigned to the mission. The air was thick with bullets, cars were on fire, buildings were collapsed. Silently, Bastion made a hand movement, and started sprinting for the nearest house. Luckily, they weren't spotted. As McGreen pulled out his shotgun, Zaln and Bastion pulled out silenced MP5's. Supposedly, the leader of the NRA was in the building. Slowly, they moved, pressed against the wall. After they all were in position against the doorway, Zaln counted in a low voice. "3....2....1. GO!" Just then, McGreen threw a flashbang inside. Bastion took the left side, Zaln took the right, and McGreen guarded the entrance. Empty. Zaln did a double take, and he was sure no one was in his hallway. Moving to the first doorway, Zaln prepared. With a sudden shout, Zaln kicked in the door and sprayed his MP5. He instantly took out 3 men. What he saw was NRA leader, Osterly, climbing out the window. Before Zaln could reload his gun, he was jumped by a henchman. Closer, closer came his knife until it was pressing against his throat. Hoarsely, he called, " Someone...help!" McGreen heard a scream coming from the right hallway, and took off running. He then saw Zaln's legs, sticking out of the room into the hall. McGreen sprinted and turned and looked into the room. There was Rika, and Zaln. He had to choose. It was either kill Osterly or save Zaln's life. Just have to add the indentations an such.