Gandalf just go through and capitalize at beginning of sentences and that's good I'm sorry it's too long to do a complete edit but from skimming that's all I really saw maybe a misspelling or two but it happens
Something to work toward then *starts mentally writing furiously* btw bast I was wondering if I could have two stories at once? I gots a great idea for another one but I'll continue the one I have right now
Could someone give me some advice? I'm trying to get out of writers block, but what I wrote doesn't seem to flow right. Help?? Liz, Lyn, and Dash were on thier way to Cevká, a the next day, as the sun was rising. Once out of the city, they headed west, walking faster than normal. They were feeling at bit uneasy. The border of Arlem an Soroth was west, and the tree of them had no way of knowing if Cevká had been captured or not. All they could do was pray that no harm had come to the city. Hours had past. The sun was high in the sky, heating up the earth. And everything was quiet. Too quiet, Liz thought. She had felt like she was being watched for awhile now. From the way that Dash and Lyn were tense, as if waiting for a fight, she guessed they felt it too. She looked behind her, then to the left and right, then forward. There weren't many places that could be used for cover. "I feel dark magic being used." Lyn said after awhile, and Dash nodded in agreement. "Keep an eye out. Were definately being watched." Liz whispered. She didn't know much about dark magic, she just knew that, like all magic, it could be unpredictable. And dangreous. Really dangerous. Another hour passed. Then a shot was fired. The arrow landed at Liz's feet. "Its a warning shot." Dash whispered. "Alright. Let's keep going. Be ready for a fight, because I'm sure they'll be one up ahead."
Thanks. I'm just not happy with what I'm writing right now. I think I might rewrite the whole chapter.