Thank you to everyone who commented. Honestly, I'm a thirteen year old with little or no writing experience. I need as much feedback as I can get. So thank you again. I write every piece of criticism people give in a notebook and have been editing as I went along on my notes. (I can't edit here sadly) it may sound nerdy or obsessed but I don't care really. It dawned on me just how much repetition there is, even I got sick of it. I also noticed how weak a main protagonist Iris is, and it's actually pathetic. On my mission to make her seem less one dimensional and more human I seem to have forgotten that it's a story, of which she is the lead, and needs to be strong and likeable, not weak, pathetic and confusing as she is now. As for the perspective jumping. It's necessary later in the story for Clover to have a perspective. But while I was proof reading I noticed Emeron has a random chapter from his perspective, which I have since rewritten in Iris'. Clover never did mention Iris' boyfriend. She was referencing to Reid. However this is too confusing, dumping so many characters on the reader at once, something I'll have to fix using filler chapters or something, but minus the humongous amount of background. As for the first story, I wrote the original one back in 2011/12 and since then the time frame has changed but not majorly. I mentioned that Celeste grew up in the middle class, in book one she is in the middle class, that's why it's slightly more normal, she's practically in a bubble, isolated from the national problems. I agree with the setting description issues. The mountain idea was rushed as it poses a problem in an upcoming chapter. The talents they have aren't too cliché. Reid's fire one is probably the most cliché. And one other I won't reveal. Without giving too much away, Iris isn't filled with as much false hope as she seems, and they don't spend the whole book in the compound. That would make the whole story even worse. I'm at a crossroads as to whether to continue. I have a helluva lot of editing to do, and I literally only discovered what you (plural) mean about the strange paragraph indenting now. If I was to abandon this project here I could try and finish it eventually on a computer and eventually post the finished thing. I just feel like it's an annoyance to people with my continued posting, especially when it tends to be poorly written at best.