Apparently not Chaos... but it doesn't matter, I'm going to take this story to Fanfiction.net now... and for those of you saying i'm ripping off books and tv shows, i urge you to think about the meaning of fanfiction.
Of course it was Courage, I AM the one who wrote it... Though Chaos seems to believe any story without him in it is less than amazing...
It's a good story. I like it. By the way, everyone who was saying you were ripping Marvel of was joking....
Was a good fun read, I see on comments you have a lot of jealous children abusing it but it was their choice to read something under *fan fiction*. Thank you for posting it and good luck in future.
I'm not sure Courage... I mean all the people saying that I'm ripping off stuff doesn't bother me... It's just the fact that they aren't smart enough to realize what the term Fanfiction means that upsets me... and it worries me that if they go onto fanfiction.net and read the fics on that site they may anger my fellow fanfiction authors, some of whom aren't as forgiving and/or in control of their emotions as I am
Okay, as the most veteran FFer and probably the best critic in this thread I'm going to try shutting everybody up, 'kay? Jade, as a very simple rule, don't feed the trolls. The more you complain, the more they complain, simples, no? As a response to your story, it's a drag to be honest. The only punctuation you use is commas and full stops, this then ends up with sentences being too long and boring to read. I had to skim the last third and the end of the description because it was just so tedious. If you could break up the the description chapter as well, that would be brilliant. Also one thing I picked up on was that the description and dialogue sections weren't paragraphed, it'd be nice on the eyes of somebody that wants to read it if you did so. Chaos, I guess you come in here as well: on the topic of it being real Fan Fiction, despite the fact we have the title of 'Fan Fiction' we FFers don't actually write Fan Fiction; we write stories, unrelated to any other fiction universe(s) except for our own. I think the last time we had a real FFer was a person that went under the name of 'BellaLaunter', she wrote Twilight and Bleach fan fic; unsurprisingly we shunted her out of FF with much pain and difficultly. You get the luxury of having a bunch of fail trolls trying to do the same, but as their dubbing would suggest, failing. All the trolls that are fail trolling,I get it D_Bo was great, I would LOVE so much to have him back and kick all the newbs, including most of you, out of FF. The problem is, NONE OF YOU WERE THERE. None of you saw newbs go crying as D_Bo masterfully destroyed them. But you, you all suck, all you do is repeat yourself and each other; and to truly troll, surprise, surprise you need to listen to what the OP and their buddies just said to twist their words and destroy them. But as this is going, I'm going to say that's too much of a mental challenge for you. All in all, Jade, sharpen up your story and ignore them, I think with some better writing skills you could potentially be an admirable writer. Trolls, shut up or do it right.
Okay Paradox... Although that stung a bit I appreciate you being honest with me and I thank you for sharing that bit of advice... And I apologize for acting childish or rude in any way with any of my comments... I guess I may not be as mature about things as I wish I was but I'm glad you pointed out the fact that I was just egging them on... So I guess what I'm trying to say is admire your display of diplomacy in the way you handled this and appreciate the advice you've provided me with, although it did wound my ego, but that doesn't matter anyway since my ego should be a bit smaller
I know that u r right about the whole fanfic not actually fanfic thing but I just like to point out the obvious