It's the begining... It doesn't always have to be major action on the get-go... Some writers like to build tension, or start in a calm manner, and then set the hook. It's all about the authors preference. Be respectful of begining writers. Help them grow their budding talents
Yeah but if its totally boring at first no one will want to read further. And it doesnt help that he keeps cussing us out -.-
Well, you sort of had it coming to you by being absolutely negative, no constructive criticism. At least attempt to help him... Give him some pointers in writing. That's the best thing to do here
Just some advice don't start a story off by saying "hi I'm ______" it shows that u really don't hav any xperience also put more description and it'll b fine
Your story must begin with "Once upon a time." it should end with "They lived happily ever after." and the butler did it.