Re: The Labyrinth Sign Up/Feedback Since I have already started the story, no more characters will be accepted as I posted a few pages ago. Sorry
Re: The Labyrinth Sign Up/Feedback Ok then, good opening, nice way to introduce story and reason for being there, and nice way of creating an image in the reader's head
Re: The Labyrinth Sign Up/Feedback Hmmmm, you could hav just a little more charcater description because you didn't tell every little detail bout the characters, and you didn't tell us nothing, but I'm just feelin that I'm not sure how they haven't died yet, but they hear death all around them so r they like super or something, Im just not sure, do u see what I'm saying?
Re: The Labyrinth Sign Up/Feedback Yeah, I realized that I tend to underdo it on the character description but thanks for reminding me I'll try and work on that next chapter And it sounds like it's a little confusing? Darn I was trying to make it less confusing without putting in a prologue I guess I failed
Re: The Labyrinth Sign Up/Feedback No no the opening was great it's just that I didn't understand the whole not dead but hear death every two seconds thing. : /
Re: The Labyrinth Sign Up/Feedback Gloomi I am sorry about the rudeness I posted that is why I insist u sign up on my story
Re: The Labyrinth Sign Up/Feedback @Cheddar I don't quite understand what you're asking lolz @ Fyre *facepalm*
Re: The Labyrinth Sign Up/Feedback Nameylan Age:14 Class:Heavy Wepons Apperence: strong built, bulky brown hair blue eyes Personality:nice,shy not scared, charming Cons:Slow but strong, temper will sometimes flare up, try to get close to people but they end up dead under his care
Re: The Labyrinth Sign Up/Feedback Ok what I'm sayin is that they hear people dying alot but they don't die : /